Therapy

Lets dance until our legs fall numb to the music in our hearts.

Drop a beat baby.

Give me some thing I can move to,

Seduce you, use you, and abuse you.

This melody is taking over me.

All I see is you, all I feel is you.

Do you hear the music playing?

I do and and it moves me in tune with you.

Following your lead, you in me and me in you.

Moving as one, rhymically and romantically.

Your taking over me.

This music, this dance, this little melody,

This here is my Therapy.

Reviews

[Rachel U.]

Grammatical Review:
*Something is one word
*You're in the third to last line.
*Rhythmically
*Let's

Other than that, you're good in my book. I very much enjoyed reading this. It was simultaneously a little dirty but cute. Strange, strange mixture. Very fun to read, although not particularly new in theme or language.
8.8/10

[alesuriko]

Cute poem. I enjoyed the message and musical aspect of it. The lines "Drop a beat
baby. / Give me some thing I can move to," was extremely too cliche for my liking. Some thing should be all one word as well; "Lets" should be "let's"; rhymically is spelled wrong should be "rhythmically". Overall, the flow wasn't rhythmical enough for a music oriented poem.

[JenLyn]

Loved it! It could be a song. Do you hear the music playing?

I do and and it moves me in tune with you.

Following your lead, you in me and me in you.

Moving as one, rhymically and romantically.

Your taking over me.

This music, this dance, this little melody,

This here is my Therapy.

I love those lines, they entire poem flows very well but those lines really caught my attention. It's very creative and original, overall a good write! Keep it up! :)

[Charles]

Nicely done poem with some internal rhythm that matches the theme. The second line in particular, being so abrupt and out of synch with the length of the nearby lines actually creates a beat as it 'drops' a beat.Keep dancing.

[Jibey]

I like the simple idea and the image of the dance and of the two moving together in a pleasing communion of minds and bodies... the satisfaction and the pleasure and the relief... wonderful therapy!

[R J Askew]

Love it. I am hostile to the whole 'therapy' thing. I just think shrinks are just bad jokes. So I felt negative towards the title. But when I read I was really happy as you were describing the best kind of music and real human therapy there is: love lust love. Brilliant stuff. I reckon 100 poets cld bring more happiness and calm to people than 100 shrinks everyday of the year.

[Coyote Poetry]

Music can create peace and happiness in a life. A very good poem. I like the story and the complete poem. A very good ending.
Coyote

[kaylyn]

this is really good, it romantic and flows

[Frantzuu]

Great poem :D

[Khaimera]

Dancing, ahhhhh, yes! I love the feeling of losing "me" in the lyrics or the music, a fast salsa and you can forget the worries, if only for that brief moment.
This captures it perfectly :) I really like this one. Edgy, also, that push and pull, that hint, partnership playing into it...it's got a nice feel to it. good write!