secret lover 1

Lucis, i love him

Hello my secret lover,
Do you remember that first time we huged?
That hug changed the way i see life and love.
When you wrapped your arms around me and didnt let go...
it was a feeling that i never felt before.
When you let me go and looked into my eyes
i got butterfly's.
Then you gave me that first kiss
it was almost magical.
You know how on movies time stops
and everything gets all hazy
and nothing else matters for that split moment in time?
Thats really how it was for me.
Did you feel the same?
Oh, and then you smiled at me
with a smile i never saw before.
You know the first thing that came to mind when i saw that smile
was how i never wanted it to leave your face.
I wanted to keep you that happy for the rest of your life.
Then it was time for you to go...
it broke my heart when you let me go.
But then you took a step back,
looked into my eyes and grabbed me one last time
and held me close as if you were making a memory of a life time.
For me it was a memory of a life time.
and it will always be a memory to last forever.

Reviews

[Kat-Marie Berti]

Very nice poem, I loved the personal feel to it, very intimate. You filled it up with emotions and that made the poem even better :) Great write!

[Shadows of Sight]

So much emotion...I can feel the heart strings pull, and then snap back and sting. Your images were very clear and beautiful. I wish i had time machine for you!
Wonderful dedication to a loved one, even if it is a secret one!
:)

[Tymme]

Few typos... huged > hugged, butterfly's > butterflies.

The 'You know how on movies time stops' part pulls away from the whole experience, brings reality into the memory. I'd suggest just 'time stopped like in the movies' or the like.

Can certainly feel the emotion, though.