Voices in my head

Everyone feels out of place,

Everyone is scared,

Everyone has secrets they hide,

Everyone has a past that is feared,

She says in her head to the voices.

Everyone hurts,

Everyone crys,

Everyone dreams,

Everyone dies,

She says in her head to the voices that are laughing.

Everyone talks,

Everyone hears,

Everyone looks,

Everyone has tears,

She says while being taunted by the voices.

Everyone laughs,

Everyone sings,

Everyone has pain,

Everyone has bruises that stings,

She says while being devoured by the voices...

Author's Note

I wrote this when I first started writing, so..... idk.

Reviews

[Mary C]

Beautiful poem

[paparapapa]

I suggest tweaking the format a little bit. It might make the poem more appealing to read. :) And I agree with Cosmic Dreamer, the 2nd "she says..." can still be made better to make the poem flow more smoothly. But still, I liked it. Great job. :)

[Cosmic Dreamer]

I like it! Very powerful and meaningful. My only constructive critisism is that the 'she says' lines break up the flow of the poem. Maybe for the second line, it could be 'she says in her head to the laughter' ? That way it is implied that it is the voices.
I really like this poem, it is very raw and expressive, with no extra words that are unnecessary to the meaning of the poem.