2

The feelings of two cannot compare to the despair that comes from both.

My hero!

How I wish for 0 again,

Nothing hurt the heart then.

The pain, there was none.

But when I looked at the bright, shining sun,

A face, yes a face, appeared, what fun!

Now, my heart has sunk, hurts by a ton.

1

A player, total player

He needs prayer.

One thing is said,

But that usually becomes dead.

This all hurts my head,

To the extent when I lie in bed,

Thinking of his face.

What a happy place.

The best place for another girl no doubt,

I just want to tear my heart out.

1

Existence?

No way, there is to much distance.

Heartache?

I want it to take a break.

How is there any attraction?

Maybe he’s just my distraction?

The flutters I get can’t be replaced,

My heart beats so fast it’s like I’m being chased!

Chased away from him, I guess.

Then it would beat less.

1 and 1 make 2

What should I do? 

2 is a crowd,

But I cant scream that out loud.

Oh, how I feel the guilt.

How it makes my vision tilt.

The love I feel for these two is a crime,

But crime involves time.

My time will be wasted away

While I wait for these 2 to leave someday…..

My mind will have to be made quick,

Before the clock goes tock, tock, tick.

It needs to be made,

Before I fade.

Fade away, out of love,

Before I get sent to up above.

Reviews

[lalacom]

Very nicely done! I loved the humor with which you described what that now appears as a hopeless situation. The end is quit dramatic, but definitely fits the world view of the character. Loved it! only one remark- sometimes the periods stopped the flow of the reading, and (in my opinion) weren't always necessary =)

[Stormy Weather]

This is like one of my favorite poems ever! You really captured the feelings of falling but not knowing where to land. Very nicely done!