Losing

Just thinking

Fear of losing.
Losing oneself.

One's faith,
inner contentment
and love. 

Losing oneself - 
is ~ horrible ...

Author's Note

I wish I may never lose the aforementioned.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I agree with your message & you have written this with much feeling. I like the details you include, like losing faith & contentment. But this does not sound like someone who has actually lived thru this experience. It sounds like someone who never wants to know what this feels like. In other words, your message could be expanded to show more about how this happens or how this feels. But as a simple statement, your message is true & easily understood (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ghania]

Oh yes! Very rightly pointed out. I have never really gone through that. It was just, what came to my mind back a year ago. But I have seen people going through it. And it frightens me.
Thanks for the constructive review.

[Zoya]

You really can lose yourself while loving others. People usually tend to forget their value when in love; getting affection in return is enough for them.
This was wonderfully written. Very well summarised in such few words.

[Ghania]

Thank you so much for your thought here. I really appreciate it. =)

[Zoya]

You're welcome

[aine]

Simply stating some powerful emotions. Good work. :)

[Ghania]

Thank U very much.

[aine]

You're welcome

[Dr. YumnaKay]

In as much as I really liked what you wrote here and quite agree to the message, I'd say writing it like this would be more impactful, especially the last line which should be separated to give a more finer/stronger impact. Just my thoughts on this. You write well.

Fear of losing.
Losing oneself.

One's faith,
inner contentment
and love.

Losing oneself -
is ~ horrible ...

[Ghania]

Thank you so much, Yumna. I appreciate your constructive comment. And I really liked the way you suggested. Have a look now. :P

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Thank you too for taking it as constructive :) always a pleasure reading good works 😊 you're welcome.

[Ghania]

Very Welcome again. :P

[Ashwin Shanker]

I wish you could place 'losing oneself' at the second last line, just before 'is horrible'. This would make the overall impact of the poem; saying that you are losing yourself completely after losing faith and contentment. Just a thought

[Ghania]

Thanks a lot, Ashwin. I will surely consider it.
I liked your constructive thought. :)))

[Dwayne J. Keeves]

Fear is perhaps our greatest foe. It to shall pass

[AYVID N]

Yes, its horrible. And scary too. Yet one finds such joy in finding oneself again. I loved this brief yet such insightful write.

[Ghania]

Thank you so much :)

[Tony Jordan]

You've penned a little poem like a prayer with a lot going for it here Nerdy.

[Ghania]

Thanks a lot, Tony. :)

[An owl on the moon]

So poignant and so powerful. What have we left to face this world if not our identity, our faith, our peace, and love itself that binds all else together. May you only find yourself fulfilled more each day, dear poet.

[Ghania]

Thanks a lot , Craig. :)

[pia]

this was really simple and yet so beautifully written.
i feel its more of a poem than a story but i love the wisdom you set here. you beautifully introduced what it means to lose something
that something being yourself and all the other factors that make you a person. Real loss in life comes from a persons self loss.
wonderful work!!! always happy to read your work

[Ghania]

Thanks a lot. Pia. I am glad U liked it. ((Hugs))