Create me

Come
Create me
Whisper sweetness
And breathe the life
I so need
Set the world
Spiraling into essence

Surround me with you
Show me that loneliness
Is but a myth
That can be dispelled
By an electric happiness

Dance in the fire for me
Move in liquefied grace
Build rapture in air

Come
Create me
With those eyes
And open the doorways
To our best possible selves
Together

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Create me
With those eyes
And open doorways
To our best possible selves--fabulous lines!

Another electric piece. This is romance...this is the penning of old world love. I am infatuated with the emotion of your work, and the honest choices that you make with your words. Beautifully done!

[ChemicalMadness]

Well done. Simple. Urging. You see where this "you" will take you, and you make us feel that picture. Crete me, indeed.

[Lilly]

This is so amazingly beautiful. It is so fluid - honestly i don't know what else to say but i truly love this!

[Aimee Mahathy]

This is a lovely poem~ An honest beckoning to a loved one. "Come, create me." How I never thought of it like that; however true. Our lovers do create us, in a way, and both become a better form of ourselves. =]
I will note, however, out of friendliness, that perhaps you meant "liquefied" rather than "luquified" in the second line of the third stanza (I think your finger just slipped =]) and that it should be "selves" rather than "selfs" in the second to last line (simple mistake though).
I really enjoyed reading this! Great work!