Love

Love

A Poem by Kitsune-

Spread your arms and take it in

Because you'll never hear me say this again

I know you've heard it a half a million times

Each one filled with a promising rhyme

Please believe what I say is true 

In three scary words "I love you..."

 

© 2008 Kitsune-


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This is lovely! It was simply fantastic, and was not your basic cliche love poem that I was expecting because of the title. I may recommend using punctuation marks, however, to help the poem flow more. Oh- and you are missing a third period on the last line (just something you might have missed).
Keep up the good work!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This has a lovely rhyme scheme and flows very well. You've also addressed the topic of "I love you" from a different perspective which I found to be clever.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

" know you've heard it a half a million times
Each one filled with a promising rhyme"

For thirteen years-old, you have a deep insight into the human heart.

Beautiful poem!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah, indeed it is scary for alot of guys. (Dare I say that loud or they'll come throwing things, LOL). I love this. Brevity at it's finest, and you've expressed yourself completely in these 6 short lines. :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely! It was simply fantastic, and was not your basic cliche love poem that I was expecting because of the title. I may recommend using punctuation marks, however, to help the poem flow more. Oh- and you are missing a third period on the last line (just something you might have missed).
Keep up the good work!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Kitsune-

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