My Light

A single candle in the darkness

When nothing seems to agree

Another chance, with every glance

He is there for me

I smile at him, he pulls me close

Again I feel so free!

I love him so, and he knows

He's my candle in the darkness

Reviews

awwww, that's quite sweet, you've got great flow going there, even though it's quite short- all the right syllables are stressed and when you say it out loud it just sounds upbeat- and if it's a happy poem, which I' pretty sure it is, that's a good thing! :) :
"Another chance, with every glance"
^^^^^ I like that part :)
and I love the way that the rhythm sort of breaks a little at the end (maybe it doesn't the way you see it, but I interpreted it as that) but the meaning/emotion isn't interrupted, it's good work- well done! :) xx

[Mistral Bilgera]

nice poem. sweet, short and very expressive... just a little polishing in the last line, and this piece will be Perfect! =)

[Caitlin Nicole]

BEAUTIFUL. You successfully made your point in few words. Very, very great job. Also I love the flow of it. It has a very nice rhythm.