FIRSTS (SHORT STORY VERSION)

This was mentioned that I should make a short story from one of my poems lol not sure if this counts as a story, but I tried ;)

I remember when it started out so simple...

The story of us feels like it went a hundred miles an hour, the days drove by quickly, and before we knew it they were gone.

My first memory was when we met at the gas station, we joked around, prank wars and all, everything just felt like friends, and nothing more.

Then before i knew it glances were being exchanged...continuously... I wasn't sure if it was me just now catching feelings, or if those had always been there...

I remember you leaving, and for the first time when you boarded the plane, to 9 months later when we picked you up at the airport, that i would never loose you.

I remember the first physical memory of us close,not quite cuddling, but close enough to always be touching... It was crazy because it was when I took your bracelet, and when you had my legs imbetween yours, and even when my hand slid into yours in the darkness of the car...That was the first time i felt safe 

I remember every first eye contact of the day, and every smile that soon followed, every unspoken conversation...was like music notes on pieces of paper burned in the eyes of a musician..

In the first fleeding moments of recent days, I still remember the first time you gave me butterflies, and somedays it brings me to tears..

Those are the days that brought me the most happiness. 

sorry im not the best at writing short stories from my poems 

Reviews

[Neville]

Make no apologies, there is no doubt about it, this is what we call a love story .. and what's more, I imagine the challenge was not an easy one .. You win tho, that's for sure .. Neville

[Masked writer]

Thank you. Im still working on it.. Its something I have with a person that is easier seen then described.

[Neville]

I understand and will be more than happy to check in on any subsequent revised versions .. Neville

[Masked writer]

Thankyou

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Hellos, Masked Writer, loved your story. It is the form called romantic comedy,
because it has its fun parts and innocent romance,
loved it all, :P ----Maynard James Keenan

[Masked writer]

Thanks. This is just a draft to something that will take time to do but will be worth while in the end #Dennis Wolf

[1809 Black Plague December]

that's great hon, confused, will check on Dennis Wolf :) thanks too, 😊😊

[Dennis Wolf]

Story writing isn't very difficult.. It's a never ending task that is never really finished, merely abandoned when you no longer have the energy, or when it's deemed 'good enough'

That being said, this is a great starting point.. You've the essentials already, the only thing you really need is to picture the first important scene: where the story ends(little stars here) . Write it down, then go to the middle, picture those scenes.. Your surroundings, the sounds, shapes, touches, scents and smells, tastes, lighting, the space around, temperatures, sensations of all sorts.. Then determine which of these are the most important... Most of the time, you'd want only the essentials for the given scene and maybe one or two background details..

To present these isn't very difficult when you mix them up with actions.
It takes a bit of practice, a lot of patience and... Countless(it'll feel like a lot) attempts before you'll say "ahh, this is a hundred times better than the first one"

But all in all, I think it's worth it. There's no improvements without the work.

If you need any help, I'm here, and I'm sure some others can offer their own help.
Cheers

[Masked writer]

Thank you for all the advice. I will be sure to try to make it better with some of the tips youve given me

[Dennis Wolf]

Not better, just longer allowing a more.. Complete picture of the story.

It's already, in essence, great.
Cheers

[Masked writer]

AWWWE Thank you

[Dennis Wolf]

Nooo problem..