Noticing the Mind

~ Captured by the light 
~Or the motion in  his eyes 
~The way I want to fight for him 
~And not knowing why
~ The way his eyes always on mine
~Waiting, wanting to read whats on my never ending mind
~And when its Night time whispers wander in the dim starlight 

Reviews

[Neville]

this is really quite something my friend .. probably my favourite Masked writer poem to date .. I have no hesitation in awarding both you & it full marks for the crafting .. Neville

[Masked writer]

Lol, i hope it is a good something. Im glad you liked it. and fully welcome to accepting thy award..

[Thomas W Case]

Very well crafted. Lots of emotion in this brevity.

[Masked writer]

Yes there is, thankyoyu.

[Chris Shaw]

I saw two people here sitting in silence, one looking at the other intently. All sorts of scenarios came into my mind. The eyes can say so much when the mouth stays silent. An interesting and visual piece.

Chris

[Masked writer]

Thankyou for stopping by Chris Shaw. Your insight is always very accurate.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for letting me know:)

[Masked writer]

No problem.

[Davidgeo]

You're quite an animal. ,

[Masked writer]

Please, speak further kind traveler

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Hellos, Masked Writer,
I like the whole poem,
esp. because you only wish to capture him,
but something tells me, you also want him
to notice you, so I like that,
love the light point, a grace and yet racy poem, exquisite, ---Maynard

[Masked writer]

M...You are presisley right. although part of me thinks he has noticed me lol

[1809 Black Plague December]

Oh, glad he does :)
it's a poem, so it conveys what the reader can only
see, but I'm so glad. I met someone who really noticed me, and was there for me, so I really like poems that show this kind of affection. :D

[Masked writer]

I apprechiate your mind set...

[1809 Black Plague December]

most Welcome, Dear,

[BraveMoon]

Love this! I think leaning into the part/idea of "and not knowing why" would be interesting. Seems like there's something to uncover there.