This is What I Am

Pin up to this brown thing,
Having to listen, to his hobble
MUSIC
Even though it gotting better now,
he got me smiling
Cover me up at the end of the day
wishing he would treat me right
And
Give me up,
to someone with a
Pare of nice TITS,
Then this smile wouldn't
Be,
For nothing
Got females always wanting me

I give them an

"Easy Smile"
This SMILE wouldn't
be for nothing
Wish he wouldn't move me
Here, and There in the dark
so i can see the world and smile

Reviews

[Melinda Weber]

Aside from grammar and spelling issues, this poem sounds like it has a bit of swagger attached to it ;) You could always try and be a little more descriptive, in helping the reader build the imagery in their head, so they can feel what the writer is trying to send across.

[Raven Starhawk]

This actually reads like something I said to myself before. ^^* But I like it because it makes me think.