There Was a Time & Place

For The Best Ex Ever

There Was a time and place

You used to be mine

And I used to be Yours


The Time passed

The Place disappeared

I was searching for your warm arms

But they were no where to be found!

I remember the time we use to hug each

other in the bus booth to keep warm and laugh at how

silly we looked


I won't forget it but I wont relive it again...

The day you stopped calling

was the day i stop talking to you

The day you walked by me

Was the day i didn't look at you

The day we were standing next to each other


Was the Day We didn't noticed each other

The day we were in the same bus booth

On a rainy day

Was the day we were hugging strangers

The day i found out you got killed by a drunk driver


Was the day I died From A Overdose

Author's Note

something i was feeling

Reviews

[Scrawl]

wow that is truely amazing and truely love

[Dante]

Oh wow i read that and it hit me hard

[Emotiionsz]

thanks for the reviews and yeaah i need to edit it....this was write months ago

[Dutch Jr.]

I love this. I love when a poet tells a story or recounts eventsfrom his/her past, and this is one of the more powerful ones I've read. You closed it with a bang, too.

[alesuriko]

First I'll start with some criticism: "they were no where to be found" ... "no where" should be all one word = "nowhere". Next there is "the time we use to hug each" ... "use" should be past tense = "used". The second "won't" at the start of the third stanza needs an apostrophe. Fifth stanza beginning "the Day We didn't noticed each other"... "noticed" should not be past tense it should be present tense "notice". There are also some "i"s that need to be capitalized.

Interesting poem, nice display of emotion and an unexpected twist to say the least. The flow isn't great and the structure needs work. Good potential.

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

Emotion! great job. this made want to cry. nice write

[Devon]

Wow this was really deep and moving

It's one of those things where we feel like we don't need
the person, yet we can't live without him


Great write mamas

[African Queen]

whoa....that was some ending!! A shocker...