I get a funny feeling,
It comes from deep inside.
I get all mad and angry,
Wanting to go and hide.
Some call it depression,
But my mom says it's just me.
But I guess that in the end,
No one will ever see,
That something may be wrong
Deep inside of me.
It's always a big thing when we look inside ourselves. If we're honest we can all find things that we're not happy with. As you say, they are the things no one else will see. Depression certainly can be a hard one to fight. Many times it seems like it's not really something wrong with us particularly, but with our whole human species. We don't always see it in others, but it seems to be pretty universal really! Thanks for a thought inspiring poem. :-)
Short, sweet, well, not so sweet actually. But it captures feelings, with simple diction and a rythmatic flow.
And this particular stanza...
" No one will ever see,
That something may be wrong
Deep inside of me."
reminds me of feelings I often have, so to me, you have a gift with poetry that connects the reader.
Simplicity is beauty.
well done and welcome to writerscafe.
This piece, combined with the picture, makes for an interesting experience. Stick with it, as an old friend used to tell me, "Keep trying stuff... you can always spit it out!"
She may have been talking about artichokes though... either way, it is good advice. Don't take away from your work in the author's note before anyone gets a chance to tell you what they think. It a self-defense thing I'm learning to avoid. Just put out the work and see where it lands without caveats. Deep inside, we're almost all the same.
It's always a big thing when we look inside ourselves. If we're honest we can all find things that we're not happy with. As you say, they are the things no one else will see. Depression certainly can be a hard one to fight. Many times it seems like it's not really something wrong with us particularly, but with our whole human species. We don't always see it in others, but it seems to be pretty universal really! Thanks for a thought inspiring poem. :-)
Sup, im Nick. Some people might know me as Nc.
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-Music is my escape.
-When I get out of school I'll be enlisting.
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