Feels and Fridays

Morning feels and Fridays basically

So i woke up today meeting the rain
then i thought,
what a lovely day
as i blink through the thoughts that consume my day
i knew a great person or even an evil person has ended the world again

how abstract can this world be!
for my endless journey to peace is at pace
for finding love has been a passion of the hopeless
Heartbreaks and Tears end my day
Hope and chance begins my day

Oh what a lovely time of the week
Ti's Friday!
A day to feel loved but i cannot be loved
for i have a scar that keeps me from the one

For a chance has been given to me to start my day
my mask on to face this phase
it's the start of a weekend
and another unexplained week.....

Author's Note

For more of this poem kindly review and see what needs to be corrected before the rest comes up. Thank you!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a nicely abstract flow of thoughts, upon a random Friday. I like the way your words twist & turn thru upbeat & not-so-upbeat observations about life . . . not really giving an opinion or feeling, but just describing the way life can go. This piece, overall, is a little more abstract than I prefer (just a preference, not a judgment). I like it when a poet gives more vivid details so we can picture the various generalities that you are naming in your poem. Like in your opening, let me feel that rain -- what does it look like? feel like? sound like? smell like? taste like? To me, the sensory details really make a poem pop.

[Nayomii]

Hello Barleygirl ! I am appreciate your acknowledgment of my poem and the review you have contributed to it. I will take it into consideration and make adequate corrections. I am so sorry for the late response. Have a lovely week ahead!

[williamisles]

(Job 38:37) Hopeful for everyone. For when we lose our hope, we lose our way. (Psalm 6:6) Tears of Joy. Time goes so fast now. Everyone guaranteed a spouse in heaven, in case they don't find one on Earth. As if in a realm where the mask is the face.

[Nayomii]

Hello William
i am so sorry but enlighten me on your review here please
regards

[williamisles]

In heaven, we are now guaranteed spouses. If we don't find them here, we receive them there, and they are perfectly for us each. The review is more of an abstract though. I reviewed what your writing made me think of rather than rating it. GOD bless you.