No Man

I am what you are, your hidden side, true reflection

When with you, am you...When with everyone, am everyone

I embody your darkness, your face that society shuns

I adore your iniquity, your misplaced sense of justice

I am a No Man trying to befriend you

You are free in my presence, for I am unworthy to judge

My face....masquerade masks, strips away to nothingness

Devoid of myself I walk, never knowing my soul

I am what you all are...You made me, now watch

An Every Man in No Man

Reviews

[Taino]

Ones true reflection... Incredible to read. I read it and reread it to visualize the No Man. I look forward to reading more of your poems. Excellent!

[thuthana]

my second favorite.

some critique:
=> line 1 "I am what you are, your hidden side..." this seems kinda contradicting. like to say "i am what you are" suggests that they are on equal footing, or the same, when "your hidden side" suggests that the narrator is the "darker" side of the person they are referring to. A fix i could suggest for this is "I am what you aren't"
=> line 1 "true reflection" i think this part should be moved onto it's own line ("a true reflection"), so that it can breathe before the following line -- it will add a space for the reader to add dramatic effect
=> first stanza: it seems like there are 2 competing ideas going on here. on the one hand it seems like there is an exploration of identity -- like how the narrator fits in. but on the other hand, there is an exploration of friendship with the person being addressed. as it stands, the first stanza seems to be competing against itself -- when i think it could definitely be more of a cohesive idea and sentiment. you might be able to do that with some description of how the "you" contrasts to the narrator and tieing that back into the questions of identity being brought up

but, again, what do i know.

[Naval Tharun]

Thanks for the reviews Susana!
=> That was intentional, your hidden side shows the real you.
=> Makes sense. Should add an ellipsis.
=> A No Man represents someone with no personality, a Chameleon if you may.

"but, again, what do i know. " - True that. :D

[Voice Crowe]

Continuing to amaze me with each poem. You do really well with this.