Different place

She has gone to a different place
A place I can not follow
She is here in this place
But I can not follow

I Try again and again
I reach out with hope
But she is in a different place
And I can not follow

Once a love a special love
All has changed forever changed
But she is in a different place
And I can not follow

Now I feel lost and alone
But not alone
But she is in a different place
And I can not follow

She talks to me but all has changed
The words are there but not there
But she is in a different place
And I can not follow

She is beside me
But when I look she has gone
But she is in a different place
And I can never follow.

Reviews

[Alex]

Any comments, as a new writer I'd really appreciate feedback.

[A.A.]

This feels almost like a song, with that refrain that keeps coming back. It's interesting; the most important bits of the poem sort of stick to you. It's like you've got two lines worth for every line like 'One a love a special love' or 'The words are there but not there'. Great style. I'm not sure you really need 'forever' in 'forever changed' - maybe something less strong could be more fitting. Other then that, thank you for a wonderful read.

Tony.