An empty space is left

Who do you love
It was me once
Who will I love
It's still you now

Who do you talk to
It was me once
Who do I talk to
No one now

Who do you turn to
It was me once
Who do I turn to
It's the mirror now

What have I Iost
Everything
I am forever lost
Without you now.

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

I had a spare moment so I figured I’d take a look. First, I understand the first time you put your writing and yourself out to your peers it can be terrifying. Rests assure, many of the reviewers here are friends not foes. On to the poem: I like the format, framed stanzas, and you speak of a broken heart, one who still holds onto something that is no longer there, or acknowledged. I know you used ‘Now’ for formatting, however, the first one (first stanza) it would read with more impact if not there (but, I understand you can’t do that, but in the last stanza, you have it twice, the second to last one I would replace to avoid repetition from bogging the poem down. Overall, it’s well expressed; the emotional tone comes through clear. Well done.

[Alex]

Many thanks for taking the time Jack, I'll take the comments on board, I'll play with the last stanza and see what comes out! Thanks.

[Alex]

Amended as suggested! The everything is more poignant now!!

[Jack Wolfe]

Packs a little more punch 'now.' Glad I could help.

[stars are far]

that was very well done, and i loved how you wrote this, and when you ever search for love, nlove yourself first then love will come :) keep the good work comin :)

[Alex]

Thank you Stars are far. First time letting folk see my poems so it's nice to hear they're not too bad!