"Broken Beauty

I came to the ruins day after day

Many souls have deemed me misanthropic

Those false accusations excuse the way

I find peace in dull paths and entropics

The way shattered buildings appease my sight

How cracked glass reflects the sunset’s true heart

Watch the fall as steel and earth reunite

See crumbling stones form accidental art

Observe nature’s constant battle with man

Vine against beam grappling for victory

Pleasing equilibrium that began

Long ago in war during history

Thus are the ruins and the battlefield 

Broken beauty had me utterly healed

Author's Note

Reviews

[Boxcat]

This is great. I loved the rhyme scheme with the couplet at the end.

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank you! It's a sonnet so that's the rhyme scheme :)

James

[Boxcat]

That makes sense now, I should have realized. My english teacher would be disappointed I guess.

[Chrissy BC]

I really enjoy that it was really amazing.

[JamesTleBourn]

Thanks, Chrissy, I appreciate the kind words!

James

[TV]

Change is the wild card in this life. It can effect us either way. Usually it is beyond our control.
All we can do is adapt and change with it...

[JamesTleBourn]

Very true, TV. Your comment reminds me of our present time.

James

[NotUsinganymore]

Very beautiful. Sometimes things or people that become broken, remain broken.

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank you for your kind words. I can handle when things remain broken, but broken people break my heart.

James

[Annie Rachele]

One of my favorite places to visit in America is the town of Gettysburg. It was the turning point of the Civil war in 1863. There is so much of it that has remained untouched. Cannon balls still in the walls of the houses, bullets still being found in the fields. There's spirits there that will never leave. Your poem reminded me of it because despite everything that's happened there, it's still one of my favorite places on Earth and I just can't understand why. Hundreds of tourists go there a year and take tours of the battlefields and walk around to the monuments. But I feel like I'm right back there in 1863, in the middle of the war. I don't know, just a thought. Long story short I like your poem, a lot. I'm sure it makes everyone feel something different, but it brings me back to 1863.

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank you for your kind words, Annie! Stay safe and keep writing.

James

[Anna]

The ending does not rhyme, needs more thought and tears of frustration. Read some more literature to improve your vision of the world and hence nuance your understand of themes such as mankind verses nature. Reading other texts will not make you lose your touch, it will make it stronger.
keep track of your syllables.

Disclaimer: I am not a poet

[JamesTleBourn]

The ending: doesn't it have the same "eeled" sound? I hear it.

As for syllables, I just counted and all have 10 except for the 12th line. What made you think otherwise (examples?)

James

[Francois DuBois]

It is absolutely beautiful! It reminds me of eating lasagna and being hit over the head with a baseball bat. Thank you so much!

[JamesTleBourn]

Lovely, my dear friend! I appreciate you stopping by! Thank you for your exuberant words! I love it when I am eating lasagna but I get interrupted by a baseball bat.

James

James

[Tertia]

I like the balance or lack of balance between order and chaos

[JamesTleBourn]

Isn't that what nature is? A balance... (I sound like Obi-Wan...)

Thank you for stopping by, Tertia, make sure to keep coming every two days, that's how often I post!

James

[Tertia]

We are the problem

[JamesTleBourn]

Fair point, but even without "us", entropy will ultimately take its course

[Tertia]

Yes but we can colonise other planets to delay the inevitable

[JamesTleBourn]

But then we only leave our planet to face the evils of entropy... we are not delaying it only becoming numb and callous

[Tertia]

There is no answer then

[JamesTleBourn]

No NATURAL answer, Tertia. You have not considered the supernatural

[ScriptedSilence]

Such gorgeous visions which you have unfolded so superbly.
So very lovely❤️

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank your for stopping by and sharing your kind words, Silence! I appreciate it (also, love your name). Make sure to stop by every two days, that's how often I post.

James

[Chris Shaw]

Your poem reminded me of the bombed sites in the city of London, where tiny flowers would spring up in the chaos. London pride, they were called. There is always beauty, even in ugliness. Mother nature reigns supreme. That's where you took me with your well crafted lines. Great work.

Chris

[JamesTleBourn]

Chris, I loved to hear where you went with those thoughts! Thank you for your kind words. I hope you are well with all this virus buzz.

James

[Chris Shaw]

Keeping well, though I have to confess being fearful like most are. Pleasure reading your work. Keep safe James.

[JamesTleBourn]

Thank you; you as well, Chris.