All the messed up f----- up things you see

For all the teens and young adults out there suffering, this ones for you....

 For all our teens and young adults who have suffered!

Your pains are real for the whole world to see, lost and lonely is how you appear to me.

 

Your souls seem tattered, broken, and bruised, tortured lives with nothing to lose.

Unknown faces, longing for oblivion to set you free, screw the world, that's your decree!

 

All the messed up, F----- up things you see, becomes the future of who you'll be.

Everytime you gain some ground, life comes again and knocks you down.

 

You find destructive ways to cope:  drugging, cutting, selling, abusing, hating, yourselves, because it seems you've lost all hope.

 

Inside, your heart is slowly bleeding, but no help comes, to soothe your needing.

Those who claim to love you best: hurt you, beat you, sex you, never let you rest.

 

It's no wonder you run away, it's easier to go than it is to stay.

Strangers take what isn't theirs, with no remorse for using you, -abusing you.

 

You're tough on the outside, seasoned by hate, if you seem callous, s**t, that's your fate.

You guys are a product of what others have made, so screw the world, it's the price you've paid!

   

Reviews

[Rachel U.]

Hm, very interesting. The content of the poem is fine, but your structure throws me off a little bit. The plethora of commas is rather *too* much. If you split apart your lines, it might suit the feeling of the poem better. Otherwise, it's good. Looking forward to your next composition.

[Julialeiona]

Wow! Really...good. I don't know how to rate... but this really moving.

[The Analog Kid]

A few minor typos. I agree with Rachel's Muse on the structure. The subject is very heartfelt. This has been universal through the ages as technology and our society evolves, but never at the break-neck speed that we see today. Society is in a state of decay--and the kids and teens suffer silently. Nice material and sentiments.

Patrick

[X]

i feel like this was needed to say. a lot of teenagers can't handle the problems they are facing due to the awkward feelings going on and how they're growing up. i really like how sincere this reads. and it doesn't sound like you're speaking to one particular sex which is hard for a writer to do.

good job lady.
keep it up.

[Marquise]

welcome new writer! oh you coming in strong! good job on this "to the point" piece!

[Coyote Poetry]

We learn the hard way. Education of experience and knowledge. Key to life. Do what you want, not what somebody else desired. A outstanding poem. I hope the next generation do better them my did.
Coyote