Losing Grip

Deep within the shadows

It lies, it waits

It wants to feed from your dying faith tonight

Ripped and exposed, bravery gone

Dignity falls to the cold hard floor

 

Torture from the past

The gas chamber of this heart

Loosing grip, tumbling far

Footing lost, grasping for breath

 Demonic hands, never erased

 

Bitter thoughts swallowing whole

Fetal extraction of cradled emotions

Thorns piercing dead cells, never again alive

Presence lost, turning to ghostly dust

Slowly vanishing from the eye

 

Hollow, inside out

Shattered cries, calls on times

Whilst blades of hope cuts on memories

Worst than the deed, needing to bleed

Poison needs to drain … one last time

 

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

I feel as though I treading on virgin territory... being the first to read this piece.

The way you can reach inside and pull out the deepest emotion and bring it to life upon the page has always amazed and mystified me. Each word feeding on the word before it.

"Bitter thoughts swallowing whole
Fetal extraction of cradled emotions
Thorns piercing dead cells, never again alive"

This is very vivid in my mind, bringing to mind one upon a cross of self-inflicted pennance. Very well written.

"Worst than the deed, needing to bleed
Poison needs to drain � one last time"

The ending was excellent, the bleeding running from the pages in deep emotional turmoil.

Another very deep and mesmerizing piece. Well done.

[Lunny]

this is an awesome poem! love it

[Poeticpiers]

An excellent piece of poetic prose weell worth the read

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Torture from the past
The gas chamber of this heart

Being your own judge jury and executioner for your mistakes, our inner demons are our toughest fight... what a great look into how the human psyche can tear you apart. Very well done.

[JRB]

"Bitter thoughts swallowing whole
Fetal extraction of cradled emotions
Thorns piercing dead cells, never again alive"
i also liked this, nice write,
Jan/uisiom

[These Haunted Hallways]

OMG! That was an amazing poem!!! I know i could not write that better lol. It like grabs u by the arm and throws u up against the wall and makes u feel what it truly feels like of the torture inside a tortured soul. U are brilliant here. Really excellent poem!

B.A.