Common Ground

Yesterday is already taken

And there is no promise of what tomorrow may hold

Every morning we wake

Staring at today’s shimmering gold

Live has a funny way of revealing itself

Knowing that this planet

Never ceases to turn

 

In this now a superficial world

Filled with false pretences and fake faces

Some unobvious beats echoes

In the furthest corners of the earth

As strangers we stand, jointly divided

Catching the pulse

Of the despair that is always nearby

 

Two separate souls slowly evaporating

Underneath the same old sky

As darkness’s pendulum swings

Opening the gates of those who could never tell

Trapped within the shadows

Of these crazed abandoned sidewalks

Etched inside the cracks of hell

 

A cosmic attraction

Born and woven from the very same realm

Mercilessly falling though thousand voids

Where angels silently walk

Among the hurried rush of ghostly prints

Paved upon a path covered in dust

Ripping through the chains of belief

 

Where our worlds finally meet

On common grounds, barren and bleak

Knowing mortal words doesn’t mean a thing

The essence of our beings, hidden

Behind the transparency of soul departed eyes

Coming to realize that in this darkness

We all stand alone in a soundless maze

 

Reviews

[Nick Erickson]

I'm not even sure what to say...

Excellent!!!

The flow - feel - pulse of this piece is mesmerizing.

"In this now a superficial world
Filled with false pretences and fake faces
Some unobvious beats echoes
In the furthest corners of the earth
As strangers we stand, jointly divided
Catching the pulse
Of the despair that is always nearby"
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"Where our worlds finally meet
On common grounds, barren and bleak
Knowing mortal words doesn't mean a thing
The essence of our beings, hidden
Behind the transparency of soul departed eyes
Coming to realize that in this darkness
We all stand alone in a soundless maze"

These were the two most powerful verses in this piece. The contrast between alone and togetherness the strongest feeling. To see yourself standing in a mass of people - alone.

Well done Natalie... well done!!!

[Jason Nuciola]

it is a grate pome

[John Stussy]

It's been a while since I read your work, and this piece made me remember why I liked reading you so much. You write very powerfully, it's very well done.

[R J Askew]

I like the third verse very much and the fifth verse even more. I think the poem ends on a really strong note, sad, but strong. Nailed down.

[Tuff Stuff]

Loved it!
What a strong piece!

T.S.

[The Tao of Bri]

Oh cool! i love this haunting and chilling manifesto... I wrote a poem echo inthe dark yesterday that was wicked short and kinda similar in theme...it surely is not as good as this.. this gave me goose bumps...

[Leran Vakem]

In the dark all are strangers to each other, just those who live in darkness knows who and where they go.
To find common grond in this time and age is hard at times
A real good piece which carries a hidden truth.
Leran Vakem