Bursting Light on Smouldering Horizons

Collaboration between myself and Gary H.

 

Light of my life bursts through bright morning sky
Shining so bright, know I am always nearby
Touching my soul, so desperate to fly
Through endless horizons, up in stratospheres so high

Cottonbud clouds shroud past regrets,
Magical hues of amourous golden rays
Holding thumbs for when we first met
Touching the face of my beloved far away.

Soft breeze of passion sees love swimming in the air
Vibrant winds craft our spirits as one
Hands express pure gentleness running through your hair
In soft crimson luminosity the sun sets to stun

Mischevious golden waves of inviting amber rays
Rainbow coloured butterflies sending honey kisses
Forever on fire, we dance, pulsate and sway
Flickering, fluttering through feelings of bliss

Smouldering skin, senuorous shoulders burn
Beating hearts between us feeling so close
Heat of the day says we never learn
Wanting you so much, thoughts to engross.

Eyes move in places never caught in the shade
Desire alive within soft splendorous airs
Love breathes forever in a breeze that never fades
Caught in a tender embrace forever shared

Sometimes sad raindrops explode on the pavement
Silent, foreboding washing away life
Watching them land sparkling with wry amusement
Deepening greys destructive sickening strife

Destiny will save us, locked within stares
Cries of the night birds fill the darkened hue
Flavours explode incandesecent with flair
Glimmering delights shine refelections of you

Fancies and musings of shimmering moonbeams
We are intimately touching in so many ways
Together at night in adoring dreams
Loving sighs always end our divided days

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

So we thought seeing that both our pieces seemed so closely connected we would join them and see what happens. Hope you all enjoy!

Reviews

[Candle in the wind]

The two have blended into one and cant be distinguished as seperate entities.The images are very vivid andexude a certain glow the poem has its own rhytm and melody.
"soft crimson luminosity " is a beautiful sensual expression.The wind seems vibrant with the sound of heartbeats and the hues and shades blend so well.

[Floating on the feather..]

This is a fabulous collaboration.
The lines merge together as they never had separate identities. The imagery is very evocative.

Great job both of you.

[Blackbirdsong]

This is lovely and I love how you've done this...perhaps we should write Charlie about a way to do collaborations more easily. I've done some myself and as well as others and there always seems to be a little a difficulty making sure everyone gets read equally. Great work here Natalie and Gary...off to read the other one now :)

[Gabrielle E. M. T.]

This is incredible!
Great imagery and deatil!
I love the color used in the text.
It really help to make the writing even more enjoyable.
Beautiful Job!
=]

[John Stussy]

I took a peek at them individually first, and I have to say that while they are phenomenal pieces on their own, interwoven together as such they make an epic piece of writing! Can't really say much that hasn't already been said though :( So I will just congratulate you two on the creation of a great piece from two really good ones.

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

oh i love this... the pieces worked so well together -- so fantastic

[Tania Leigh]

I had read Gary's poem once before, and loved it.....I can't believe how well these two pieces mesh.
Even the titles marry well. Excellent job, you two! :-)

[Stacy A. Foster]

The blending isn't seamless BUT it comes off nicely as a couple talking to one another. I read this more as a gentle conversation than a blended piece. It works well that way and the color changes in font complement it nicely.

Nicely done!
Stacy

[Laughing Lunatic]

Wow!! This is beautiful! Imagery is outstanding I love it!! =) I can't believe that they were ever separate they go perfect together. Bravo to both of you!! =) You got a standing ovation.

[The Tao of Bri]

"Cottonbud clouds shroud past regrets,
Magical hues of amourous golden rays
Holding thumbs for when we first met
Touching the face of my beloved far away. "

Very stunning imagery! I loved this piece and the photo does dove tail perfectly!!~B

[Nicholas Hallows]

This works really well. Spirits and words crafted as one. NH