I Close My Eyes

I close my eyes to not let my tears fall

I close my eyes to not see these four walls

I close my eyes strongly so I can see a white light

Because all I see is darkness with my open eyes

I close my eyes to sleep and leave

And be in my own world , my dreams

I close my eyes to imagine beautiful things and be with you

Because I can only see what I already know , ugly truth

And which is you’re too far

And I’m full of scars

And we’re a miles apart

And I have a broken heart

I can only see when I close my eyes

I can only die with my open eyes

 

I can’t imagine a world without you

So I close my eyes ...

 

Reviews

[Darian B.]

I rather like this piece (havent yet read one from you that I dont, and I dont think I will). It sucks when we can only be happy when we picture what happiness would be for us and then we open our eyes and reality hits us again. When in sleep we live a dream and in wake we live a nightmare, both become just as terrifying. I like what you portrayed here. As William said, it is very relatable

[Black Jess]

I'll make sure that you won't dislike any of my poems , I'll write them with all my emotions . Thanks for believing

[William Liston]

For some reason, this poem reminded me of a quote by Edgar Allan Poe: “Those who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night.” I guess that's because of the "open eyes, closed eyes" theme in this poem ... kinda reminds me of Poe's facsination with dreams.

You've described strong emotions in this piece. It's a sad feeling when you only see joy through closed eyes. Your line "Because all I see is darkness with my open eyes" describes this feeling almost perfectly, and on top of that, it's a very clever line ... nice job.

I think that anyone who reads this should find it relatable. Thanks for sharing :)

- William Liston

[Black Jess]

Thank you William ^^

[Howard Savage]

I close my eyes is a strong poem with profound emotions. Open your eyes and realize that the love you have for another is dangerous love. You must collect yourself before you make a fool of yourself. When you love someone else more than you love yourself you are traveling down a destructive pass. Great write and I hope it is just a writing and not reality.

[Black Jess]

Thank you , there's a little bit of reality in it but it's not too miserable for me don't worry , It's true that I write a lot about sorrow but it's not always my situation , sometimes I describe others' situation , and when I write about my own sadness I manage to escape from it and fight it , so ... In real life I'm more crazy and I laugh all the time even though I hide a lot inside of me , I don's show my deep dark feelings to others because I know they won't understand and they become sick of me , so I show my feelings to these papers and to you, the member of Writerscafe, hoping you;ll understand , and I receive in return a great support by you guys , so I juts wanna say '' Thanks '' for your help and support .

[Darian B.]

I must disagree Howard, there is nothing wrong with loving someone else more than you love yourself as long as you do love yourself and it is actually the way it should be if a relationship is to last, especially to the point of marriage. If every person in every couple loved them self more than they loved their partner, every relationship would end poorly. When we choose to put someone above our self,we create a lasting friendship, and even a relationship. Perhaps the one who loves another more than he (or she) loves himself will make a fool of himself, but he will know that he did every thing he could to make the relationship work

[Black Jess]

I agree with you on this point , true love is to love the other person more than you love yourself and it's what makes a relationship stronger . But I'm not living a true love right now , and I think I'm way too far from it .This was a passing moment , a moment when I was so confused about my feelings , I didn't know what I'm feeling , is it love ? or it is just admiration ? I honestly felt something about someone , I just didn't know what was it and how to explain it , so I wrote the only thing I was sure of , and it was that I always dream about this person and I felt happy in my dreams because he was in them . I try so hard to not fall in love , but If it's coming, then i will accept it with open eyes !

[Darian B.]

Well spoken. To be honest, I dont know what defines true love but if you try not to love him and you find yourself doing so anyway, I think it is true enough to be right