Paint me in the colors of Spring-
Egg yolk yellow, and
Sugar plum pink.
Turquoise of the clear sky,
and in shades of saffron and honey.
Bordeaux of a butterfly,
sour chardonnay green.
Paint me with a kaleidoscopic pallete
of violet specks and golden hues.
Paint me in fuschia and lime,
in topaz and peacock blue.
Paint me like the spring rains, that draw out
ripeness in Mangoes, Beets and Apricots.
Birthing sweet fat health,
even from corruption and rot.
THIS IS WONDERFUL. I love the fullness and colorfullness of your metaphors. With each verse I read, I had a delightful picture of all the colors, shapes, sounds and even smells!!
I love it! BTW: nice to have you back :)
PD: I'd give it a score of 110 if I could ;)
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Hey, stranger😛 how are you doing?
6 Years Ago
Stranger? What da heck??? xD xD
I'm doing just fine, wondering when are you chatting with me .. read moreStranger? What da heck??? xD xD
I'm doing just fine, wondering when are you chatting with me again xD
6 Years Ago
Btw, would you like me to convert yout poem into a song?
Heya!.....i just saw this comment today..dunno how i missed it
6 Years Ago
About the song...wow that would be so interesting😍...but it's really not that great of a poem to .. read moreAbout the song...wow that would be so interesting😍...but it's really not that great of a poem to make a good song..
6 Years Ago
Well, simple things can be as beautiful as complicated things, if you know how to use them. Then, ju.. read moreWell, simple things can be as beautiful as complicated things, if you know how to use them. Then, just listen to "Love Me Do", simple lyrics yet wonderful song!
Bordeaux of a butterfly
ripeness in Mangoes, Beets and Apricots
This is full, ripe and vivid.
One can almost feel the vibrant colors, scents and curves.
Great job.
And I love the ending. Spring/life contrasted to "corruption and rot"
Good little reminder to indulge while we still can.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much! This poem was more of a quickie. Didnot pay much attention to the words. Glad tha.. read moreThank you so much! This poem was more of a quickie. Didnot pay much attention to the words. Glad that you still enjoyed!
A wonderful poem to rouse the muse. Your words are as sweet as the meaning. Love it. :)
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much! It was rather a quick poem and did nothing to rouse my sleepy muse :'(
Gla.. read moreThank you so much! It was rather a quick poem and did nothing to rouse my sleepy muse :'(
Glad you liked it!!
THIS IS WONDERFUL. I love the fullness and colorfullness of your metaphors. With each verse I read, I had a delightful picture of all the colors, shapes, sounds and even smells!!
I love it! BTW: nice to have you back :)
PD: I'd give it a score of 110 if I could ;)
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Hey, stranger😛 how are you doing?
6 Years Ago
Stranger? What da heck??? xD xD
I'm doing just fine, wondering when are you chatting with me .. read moreStranger? What da heck??? xD xD
I'm doing just fine, wondering when are you chatting with me again xD
6 Years Ago
Btw, would you like me to convert yout poem into a song?
Heya!.....i just saw this comment today..dunno how i missed it
6 Years Ago
About the song...wow that would be so interesting😍...but it's really not that great of a poem to .. read moreAbout the song...wow that would be so interesting😍...but it's really not that great of a poem to make a good song..
6 Years Ago
Well, simple things can be as beautiful as complicated things, if you know how to use them. Then, ju.. read moreWell, simple things can be as beautiful as complicated things, if you know how to use them. Then, just listen to "Love Me Do", simple lyrics yet wonderful song!
I liked the beauty you put in your writing. It was a bit difficult with some unknown words because English isn't my first language. At first I thought you were talking about actually painting a picture.
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Thank you so much for the review! I can understand your dilemma...i often experiment with learning n.. read moreThank you so much for the review! I can understand your dilemma...i often experiment with learning new languages and search poetry and writing in those to sharpen my knowledge, and i can totally relate with you! Sorry for the delay in commenting though. Work keeps me too busy😔
Where's my paint brushes? This is an exquisite example of prose at its best - loved the stanza structure, word combinations and lyrical flow - a great read! Delicately beautiful … :-)
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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