The title drew me in, but once I started to read I couldn't stop! I loved this and I can very honestly say that. It was a joy to read. I loved the imagery you used and how well each sentence and verse flowed so beautifully. Just from this poem I know that I am going to enjoy reading more of your works!
The title drew me in, but once I started to read I couldn't stop! I loved this and I can very honestly say that. It was a joy to read. I loved the imagery you used and how well each sentence and verse flowed so beautifully. Just from this poem I know that I am going to enjoy reading more of your works!
If I must die let me not perish like a worm who lives his life beneath the ground eating dirt only to die unnoticed and return to the earth which nourished him. But if I must die, let me die like the maple leaves of autumn; bursting in glorious flames above the earth and drifting in beauty to the joy of children and passers by. At least I will have made the world a little brighter, once.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Wow...that sounds so exquisite! Even in a poem so morose and depressing, you've found a beautiful vi.. read moreWow...that sounds so exquisite! Even in a poem so morose and depressing, you've found a beautiful vision... Thank you so much for this review!
this has a sort of "pre-death" theme, in that your talking about death and decay when the real death is winter. I don't know just what I thought
Posted 7 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Jack! And i reckon you are right in your thoughts...perhaps the soul is only rest.. read moreThank you so much, Jack! And i reckon you are right in your thoughts...perhaps the soul is only resting till the real death comes along...
I feel a darkness of the soul here in your sweetly melancholic poem. Yes, autumn brings the fall, and we all must have our eventual autumn. But I don't think it is 'paradise forgotten'. Don't we die, so others may live, and Life goes on?
Posted 7 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Yes, truly...fall is but for the new leaves and buds to grow when the spring comes along! Thank you .. read moreYes, truly...fall is but for the new leaves and buds to grow when the spring comes along! Thank you so much for reviewing and your own thoughts are quite beautiful!
Cheers!
Autumn is the best season of the year. Anyone who disagrees I will direct them to this poem.this is extraordinary. One of the best poems I've read in the cafe.masterfully written
Posted 7 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you so much, KC! It am overjoyed that you liked this poem! And yes, autumn is beautiful in its.. read moreThank you so much, KC! It am overjoyed that you liked this poem! And yes, autumn is beautiful in its own way..💛
i just read "I Am..." by emmajoy and the flavor of that is also dark as this one is...what is in the air i must wonder that poets together express this same depression ... arrrrrrrrrrgh! ;) such dire straights when we pray and pray and pray to seemingly no avail :((( i use to love fall ;)))) supper emotive write ...nitty gritty human fall .. whew
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Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, E.... i dunno...most of the beautiful things are depressing...so..🙄
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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