Halloween's long gone...but I wanted to write a piece with a subtle scary undertone...
This one's still in the editing process...suggestions are welcome! :))
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A fine piece indeed!- Never be afraid to revisit a piece time and again. Poetry is all about writing- then re-writing. Sometimes i write copious lines but use only two or three from the pages I have written.
I wrote a piece circa 10 years ago- and finished it last year! Thats the beauty of poetry- it can constantly evolve as we enjoy new experiences.
Well done!
Posted 6 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
Thank you so much for visiting, and I apologize for replying so late
5 Years Ago
My pleasure, and no need for apologies,- we are all busy people! Looking forward to reading some mor.. read moreMy pleasure, and no need for apologies,- we are all busy people! Looking forward to reading some more of your work.
Best wishes
Ali
You create such a sacred world here in the wildness of the scents, the colors, the flavors, every sight and sound. It is a melancholy magnificence. Deep and wondrous!
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for this kind review!
Ps I love the phrase "melancholy magnificence."
I enjoyed this poem. Not scary but the description is wonderful and create good places and visions for the reader.
"Her skies were always pastel,
wound with peach silk threads...
She danced as the musk-laden wind blew,
as the dust rose, and enveloped the grass beds..."
I did like the above lines a lot. Thank you dear poet for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Coyote for that review! :))
I am very glad you like those lines...
the imagery is intoxicating for me ..i would fall in love with this Gypsy for sure .. glad to fall under her spell ... i especially think this is so sublime and brilliant:
" Her breaths--measured and counted
in cinnamon sticks
and coconut milk...."
i'm so happy to see your face Moonie! :)
E.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Same here, Einstein! So happy to be back...I'm still not as active as I would like to be on here th.. read moreSame here, Einstein! So happy to be back...I'm still not as active as I would like to be on here though...
And thanks for the review! :))
MFD,
The nature with its abundant treasures are an item, to be the biggest , which generated the stir inside writers. As an area of consolation it worked as hideout for them ever. The emotions starts with it and diminish with it. So the scars are visible always like above.
enjoy it and recreate it......lucky writers
excellent attempt indeed....
carry on....
really tasted its absolute solitude and rare moments...
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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