Winter magic (haiku)

~my first haiku~

Still frozen forest

Fragrant moss quivers beneath

the magic carpet

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

It has been so hot lately, so taking a journey into your winter magic brings a cooling, sweet softness to the day. Visualizing the stirring, frozen world, all in the wondrous cloak of white. There is no enchantment so sacred as waking to this chilled space of light. Beautifully voiced.

[Moonie]

Thank you so much for the kind words!!

[An owl on the moon]

May the moon cover you in everlasting inspiration. :)

[emmajoy]

A beautiful first haiku.. you capture the form and the landscape so very well.

[Moonie]

Thank you, Emmajoy!! Glad you liked it!

[Re-Pete]

breathtaking imagery. i can feel the coldness wrapping that landscape - chilling. opening alliteration grabs you and pulls you in. love the 'magical' last line.

[Moonie]

Thanks a lot for the review! Appreciated muchly!:))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

works very well with nice alliteration enhancing the first line...

i like the moss quivering, shivering...when it should be warm being covered...but every covering is not warmth, is it?
some just leave us freezing beneath.

j.

[PoeticSorcery]

"winter is coming, and we are not afraid"~game of thrones

[Moonie]

I thought someone might allude to that! ;)))
Thanks for the review and the quote! :)))

[Alfred Kukitz]

and with vaccum in hand take all the anticipated spring the season offers.

Very nice!

Regards,
Al

[ANTO]

The haiku itself is very much a personification of you I feel Moons.
Even in your trying of the form you are like the fragrant moss waiting to spring forth from a period of stillness. Nicely done. Congrats.
:)

[Moonie]

I can always trust you to find a beautiful meaning out of an ordinary situation! :))))
Thanks, Anto!

[Woody]

Hello stranger.
congratulations on your first newborn :)
conjures a nice image of the snow-covered floor of the forest.

[Moonie]

Yunno..I read haiku rules over and over again to write one...but I could write this only when inspiration struck..thanks woody, cheers to my 1st haiku.. ;))

[Woody]

good to try your hand at various things.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Just 3 lines are really enough to express the Winter magic. Amazing!!

[Moonie]

Thanks, skyfall...sorry for the late reply..was very inactive...I'll be reviewing back shortly. :)))

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Its okay. You're most welcome :)

[Einstein Noodle]

lights up a fine scene in my minds eye ... the magic carpet can be below my feet or above my head ... love that! i think it is an impressive first go at the haiku!!
E.

[Moonie]

Thanks for that comment, E. Really hits home!!
And thank you for checking up on me...I'm back now.., (hopefully)
Hugs and love!

[Moonie]

Ps I went through your page...dayum..I have a lot of poems to check out!!
Will be doing it shortly.. :D
♥♥♥

[Einstein Noodle]

happy to see you back! thank you for all your visits whenever you can :)
E.