Winter magic (haiku)

Winter magic (haiku)

A Chapter by Moonie
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~my first haiku~

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Still frozen forest
Fragrant moss quivers beneath
the magic carpet


© 2018 Moonie


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It has been so hot lately, so taking a journey into your winter magic brings a cooling, sweet softness to the day. Visualizing the stirring, frozen world, all in the wondrous cloak of white. There is no enchantment so sacred as waking to this chilled space of light. Beautifully voiced.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words!!
An owl on the moon

7 Years Ago

May the moon cover you in everlasting inspiration. :)



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A beautiful first haiku.. you capture the form and the landscape so very well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Emmajoy!! Glad you liked it!
It has been so hot lately, so taking a journey into your winter magic brings a cooling, sweet softness to the day. Visualizing the stirring, frozen world, all in the wondrous cloak of white. There is no enchantment so sacred as waking to this chilled space of light. Beautifully voiced.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words!!
An owl on the moon

7 Years Ago

May the moon cover you in everlasting inspiration. :)
breathtaking imagery. i can feel the coldness wrapping that landscape - chilling. opening alliteration grabs you and pulls you in. love the 'magical' last line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the review! Appreciated muchly!:))
works very well with nice alliteration enhancing the first line...

i like the moss quivering, shivering...when it should be warm being covered...but every covering is not warmth, is it?
some just leave us freezing beneath.

j.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"winter is coming, and we are not afraid"~game of thrones

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

7 Years Ago

I thought someone might allude to that! ;)))
Thanks for the review and the quote! :)))
and with vaccum in hand take all the anticipated spring the season offers.

Very nice!

Regards,
Al

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The haiku itself is very much a personification of you I feel Moons.
Even in your trying of the form you are like the fragrant moss waiting to spring forth from a period of stillness. Nicely done. Congrats.
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

8 Years Ago

I can always trust you to find a beautiful meaning out of an ordinary situation! :))))
Thanks.. read more
Hello stranger.
congratulations on your first newborn :)
conjures a nice image of the snow-covered floor of the forest.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

8 Years Ago

Yunno..I read haiku rules over and over again to write one...but I could write this only when inspir.. read more
Woody

8 Years Ago

good to try your hand at various things.
Just 3 lines are really enough to express the Winter magic. Amazing!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

8 Years Ago

Thanks, skyfall...sorry for the late reply..was very inactive...I'll be reviewing back shortly. :)))
Writer at last! Sky ~

8 Years Ago

Its okay. You're most welcome :)
lights up a fine scene in my minds eye ... the magic carpet can be below my feet or above my head ... love that! i think it is an impressive first go at the haiku!!
E.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

8 Years Ago

Thanks for that comment, E. Really hits home!!
And thank you for checking up on me...I'm back.. read more
Moonie

8 Years Ago

Ps I went through your page...dayum..I have a lot of poems to check out!!
Will be doing it s.. read more
Einstein Noodle

8 Years Ago

happy to see you back! thank you for all your visits whenever you can :)
E.

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Added on November 8, 2015
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