Little Worm

What is a little worm to do...

Other than stuffing up its belly with

baby leafs and buds, as though

they were blackcurrant ice-creams,

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes ..the "awakening" :) love my experience in reading your poem ..its fun, playful, full of marvelous images ...and it is most certainly layered ... every other line i thought to point that one out ..then that one..then again..that one ..i think your talent really shines in this poem Moon.. glad i found it! but really..on reading again ..i must say this line especially is so creative and vivid:
" maturing like popcorn in the oven..."
the emerging chrysalis has never been more aptly described .. well done says i! i feel happy in reading "Little Worm" ..and i am inspired to deeper spiritual awareness :)))
E.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

it all looks so.innocent... "laughing its antenna off" now that's funny :D Max rating for this one.

[~]

Awww.. super!! all of the sudden I want to be a tinny green little worm. I want to fill my willy belly full of yummy food and be the most mischievous worm of the enchanted forest. I would giggle every minute, and go and tease all the butterflies, lick the dew in the mornings from all the fresh leaves, and nimble of them juuuuust a little bit. :) and then-- ta-da!!! me-butterfly!! :):)
loved this one my oh so fair and magical daughter :)

[Moonie]

Haha. Love that ta-da!! A tiny worm's life can be horribly exciting if you ask me. What with all the leaf-chewing, butterfly-teasing, dew-licking moments to experience.... ..........be careful once you morph into a pretty butterfly after that perfect ta-da though, mama moon. Those tiny squirmy worms can drive you crazy with their antics.... they aren't as cute as they appear to be.... ;))

[Lydia Shutter]

How adorable this poem is....there is a charming innocence to it. Meantime, between the lines is an important life lesson. We must all follow our thoughts to the ultimate goal....spiritual awakening! We must be open to learn new things always. Love the line, "maturing like popcorn in the oven!" Not only a good simile, but the imagery is fantastic! Lydi**

[Moonie]

Bang on!! People go on with their gluttonous life, not once trying to achieve something greater. Thank you for the lovely review!!! :))

[Terrence Chang]

This poem has potential. I must say. Good write and keep posting.

[Moonie]

Thank you, Terrence! :))

[Alfred Kukitz]

It's all a mystery! This is cute I can't say anything bad about it. There is a sweetness in you that finds its way into your pen.

Regards,
Al

[Moonie]

Haha, yep it's shrouded in mystery. Thanks for the awesome review, Al!!! :))
I appologize for the delay in replying. I had left WC for some time.

[nazia]

This is wonderful. one thing for sure i never thought of worm like that.. I don't what made you write that but whatever it was, I thank that thing. Lovely work :)

[Moonie]

Thanks, Nazia. Hehe, a worm's life can prove to be quite interesting according to me.. after all if you are a bird, be an early bird, but if you are a worm, sleep late...

[J.R.H.]

I really liked reading this. It was cute and full of fun imagery. Thanks for the read.

[Moonie]

Thank you for the great review, J.R.H. I am glad you liked it. :))

[icelandicblue]

Perhaps the little worm is a caterpillar with metamorphosis in its future and will turn into a beautiful butterfly. Or perhaps its just enjoying a gluttonous life. Who knows? The piece is light and sweet. I would leave it as is.

[Moonie]

Metamorphosis in the future? What a great theory... could be true... I do feel like the grinch down the end, after all the worm seemed so happy. :))
Thank you for the kind words and the quite plausible theory. :))

[Woody]

haha of course you knew I would like this one. my sort of "silliness".
I don't know how you could improve on this. I like it the way it is.
I once knew a worm.. ach I won't bore you with it.

nice one Moon :)

[Moonie]

My obsession with your stories might have fueled this one. I don't know why but the worm does sound like some of your characters, especially the one in Think tank...

Haha, I've caught the silly bug!! Yay! And yeah, I knew you would like it!!
Would love to hear about the said worm... c'mon I told you about this one!! :D

[Woody]

hahaha

A cute little woodworm from Milan
Who eats as much wood as he can
read morehahaha

A cute little woodworm from Milan
Who eats as much wood as he can
He came from afar
To his favourite bar
Said is the bar tender here, my man?

[Woody]

looks like the site ate up the rest of the limerick. maybe you already know it.
anyway here's the rest
he came from afar
to his favourite bar
said is the bar tender here my man?

[Moonie]

Lol, that's the thing with your writing. It sounds funny even when you've read it already. Is this from the dis-arsed-her collection? Hmm, not sure...
I know this much that I can never write a limmerick... it is very difficult to make someone laugh...

[Moonie]

Dis-arsed-er always makes me laugh...I swear I can never forget that pun!!! :D

[Woody]

:) yes I put them in a little collection.
funnily enough I'm the opposite. I struggle with a real poem but find limericks easy to write.

[Moonie]

Woody, I think your descriptions of the scene your stories are dealing with are particularly pretty like the one in the Aphrodite one. Why not make them a bit more poetic and fix them into stanzas. That could work.

[Woody]

I think I'll give it a try. the rhyme is easy but I have trouble with the scan, the rhythm...