Magic

~pure magic~

The sillage of your

 mint - green eyes

    still 

    lingers

like cold water

   onto 

icy windows after a

winter's showerwork. 

You've transfixed me

like ghosts entrapped in a

wizard's glass bottle.

Caught me like 

       Fallen

          leaves

 in the palm of a chartreuse pond.

Enchanted me. 

Ensnared me. 

Enthralled me, 

with your eyes. 

My heart is yours, my dear--

    at your command. 

         Soy cautivo de tu amor, 

            tu prisionero. 

Author's Note

Sillage= the beautiful french word meaning " a veil of scent that a person leaves behind when walking or when you enter a lift and smell that someone has been there before you,"
It is one of the prettiest untranslatable words.

The last lines have been taken from the song "Lloro por ti" by Enrique Iglesias.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for including the meaning of sillage!!!! just astoundingly beautiful .. hailing from farm land i was wondering about your unique use of the word ;) those eyes in contrast with cold water and winter showers is graphic .. it hits the pane, wants to freeze; but simply can't for the heat .. lots of admirable language but "...chartreuse pond." transfixes me
E.

[Moonie]

Another brilliant review, E. Your reviews have a way of finding a permanent residence in my heart... :))
Thank you, E. :))

[Einstein Noodle]

love and peace moon!! right back at ya :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Moon daughter, I positiviely love this one. What a great feeling to walk into the beautiful wafting scent of someone whose just walked out. Everyone should leave such a positive aftertaste to their presence. My favorite lines were
"You've transfixed me
like ghosts entrapped in a
wizard's glass bottle." Absolutely loved this one. A new favorites.

[Moonie]

I really loved the word "sillage" the moment I read it. In here, I think it's not the stranger who was haunting, but his sillage--the memory he left behind him.
Wow, what a lovely review you've left, ocean star!! :))

[Bright Ocean Star]

awwe, thank you. It's easy to leave you great reviews. You write some great poetry! :)

[Moonie]

I think now it's my turn to say aww. :))

[Matching Socks]

I love that word 'sillage'
This poem is so enchanting my friend, such wonderful metaphors to enhance the magic.
Nice job! :)

[Moonie]

I love the word too!! I am so glad you visited and left such a great review! Thank you! :))

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome, always a pleasure to stop by to read your words. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Enchanted me.
Ensnared me.
Enthralled me,
with your eyes.

My heart is yours, my dear--
at your command."

You do keep us transfixed at your powerful writes. A pure magic indeed...:)................

[Moonie]

Ah, that's some review!! :))
Thank you for the extremely kind words, Sami sir!! :))

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome most fairly...:)..............

[Woody]

now this is true magic. the effect a beautiful stranger will have on us at a random encounter can be lethal but delectable too. happens to me all the time.
amazing write Moon's Daughter. truly ensnaring.

[Moonie]

Ah, woody, thank you, my dear for the lovely review!! Happens to me a lot too. :))

[Woody]

you're very welcome Moon. been watching you for a while. you haven't written much lately.

[Moonie]

Yep, I had been feeling quite depressed and low these 2 weeks (one week?? Don't really know how much time passed.) I didnot review much either. I only started again yesterday with your story.

[Woody]

:)))))))))

[Orchid]

Thank you for explaining sillage. I was going to look it up. The following lines stand out to me. Why the image of Dumbledore pulling memories from his head came to me, I do not know. But that it did.

"You've transfixed me
like ghosts entrapped in a
wizard's glass bottle."

[Moonie]

Haha, the sweet Headmaster in love... Now, that I think of it, I am reminded of the penseive (am I spelling it right? I read the books so long ago..) too. Thank you for stopping by, dear. Harey Poter reference always cheers me up.. :))

[Moonie]

Harry Potter*

[Orchid]

Loved the books and movies - the image popped into my head :)

(btw pensieve is the correct spelling) for that little dish of memories

[Moonie]

Yeah, I even registered myself on pottermore... :))