Magic

~pure magic~

The sillage of your

 mint - green eyes

    still 

    lingers

like cold water

   onto 

icy windows after a

winter's showerwork. 

You've transfixed me

like ghosts entrapped in a

wizard's glass bottle.

Caught me like 

       Fallen

          leaves

 in the palm of a chartreuse pond.

Enchanted me. 

Ensnared me. 

Enthralled me, 

with your eyes. 

My heart is yours, my dear--

    at your command. 

         Soy cautivo de tu amor, 

            tu prisionero. 

Author's Note

Sillage= the beautiful french word meaning " a veil of scent that a person leaves behind when walking or when you enter a lift and smell that someone has been there before you,"
It is one of the prettiest untranslatable words.

The last lines have been taken from the song "Lloro por ti" by Enrique Iglesias.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for including the meaning of sillage!!!! just astoundingly beautiful .. hailing from farm land i was wondering about your unique use of the word ;) those eyes in contrast with cold water and winter showers is graphic .. it hits the pane, wants to freeze; but simply can't for the heat .. lots of admirable language but "...chartreuse pond." transfixes me
E.

[Moonie]

Another brilliant review, E. Your reviews have a way of finding a permanent residence in my heart... :))
Thank you, E. :))

[Einstein Noodle]

love and peace moon!! right back at ya :)

[Terrence Chang]

Gran escritura Naomi. I love the description like magic. Keep posting

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. Even a bit of Spanish.
"Enchanted me.
Ensnared me.
Enthralled me,
with your eyes. "
Good to be overtook by the want of love. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry dear friend.
Coyote

[Moonie]

Thank you for the lovely words, Coyote!! I appreciate your visit!! :))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[~]

ohhhh love that song!!! but i really like your poem better! He has a great singing voice, but your poem sings to the heart. Perfect imagery. My favorite was the cut leaves.

magical writing indeed!

loved it sweet one!

[Moonie]

Oh my!!!! :)) You have brightened up my page with your soft and gentle light, mama moon!!!!! :D Do you have any suggestions to make it better though?

I am sooo very very glad that you loved it! :))

[~]

This one is just perfect :)

[Jennie Baron]

That word is going to be part of my vocabulary from now on!

Your words weave wonderful images and this poem has indeed enchanted and enthralled me. Very memorable writing.

[Moonie]

It has made a permanent place in my vocabulary too!!! Thank you for the super review!!! :D
Have a great day ahead, ma'am! :))

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh yes, the green eyes can do that.....but when they do, it is a glorious feeling. I liked the Spanish lines at the end.....when Enrique sings them, I am captivated. Lydi**

[Moonie]

Oh wow, I reckon green eyes are the prettiest ones. I was playing around with different languages in this one, as green eyes always sound so exotic.
I am glad you like the song. I like it too, and his voice is truly lovely.

Thank you for the stellar review!! :))
I appreciate it a lot. :)

[Ana B.]

Wow, quite an magical impact , very beautiful and artfully arranged words.......adore this one.
Stunning, brilliant work my friend :)

[Moonie]

Thank you loads, Ana!! Love the review!! :D You've got me smiling ear-to-ear!

[Ana B.]

:D Anytime my dear.

[Fran Marie]

Magnifique poeme ..like the lines.. caught me ...like fallen leaves ..in the palm of a chartreuse pond..nice descriptions within this lovely piece...

[Moonie]

Wow, thank you, ma'am! I appreciate your lovely comment! :D

[MsJewel]

You have created some beautiful images for the reader to enjoy, but more than that is the lovely feeling after reading your words...Stunning poetry my friend and the french adds even more beauty and grace.

:) Julie

[Moonie]

Oh yipee!! I think I've lost my sanity, but to called beautiful by you, ma'am!!!! :)) That's an absolute pleasure!!
Haha, excuse my lack of sensibility.. thank you for the great review!! :))

[Alfred Kukitz]

At times the poem is befitting the poet that you think the poem is actually the person. I loved this poem with a conviction of a saint to his religion.

Regards,
Al

[Moonie]

Aah, that review made me smile, Al!! :D
As in the poem is the person who has transfixed the poet?? Love that wit!! :D
Regards.. :))