Wine and Water

~a fun write~

Your fortified tinctures

have diluted my memories, Mister!

Your vanilla essences

have ruined my past.

It is time, that mildness was a crime.

Your hard, cool logic solidified my

flying thoughts,

crystallized my airy mind,

wet and sobered my dreams,--

Weighing them down.

Your clear, little head,

brainstorming

my storms

has reduced them to dust.

Author's Note

I had fun writing this one, I hope you have fun reading it.

Reviews

[FOih;]

"brainstorming my storms" is my favorite line. I have a question though, illogical as it might seem, but isn't chaos in all love stories? I'm not defending someone who destroy's dreams, but love isn't sans its stormy weather now and again...

Reading it again though, that the storms do reduce your dreams to dust, tell me you need someone who can build rather than destroy.

[Moonie]

Thank you, Ian, for the beautiful words. I am all for chaos and illogical things...in this scribble I was trying to convey realism vs romanticism...I had a vision of two lovers, intricately connected and yet so apart in their views...one's the dreamer, the other is the logician. And I thought perhaps I should show the situation through their eyes. This is the one shown through the dreamer's eyes. I have the other one(the one through the logician's eyes) around somewhere, I reckon. I would post it here someday.
Thanks again for stopping by. I haven't been on this site since a long time. I would reciprocate as soon as possible. :)))))

[Adam Whitworth]

great fun, I've got a glass of brandy now, but everything in moderation

[Moonie]

Haha, moderation is the Devil's nickname... Glad you enjoyed!! :))

[Jamestown]

Yes I could feel the fun deriving from this piece, and yes I truly enjoyed
reading it, I could absolutely feel the serious emotions, but almost in
a humorous way, maybe the " Mister " made that happen!
Fantastic word choice and delivery was smooth as silk,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Moonie]

Haha, thank you very much! :)) I was aiming for Logic vs. Emotions, but wanted to attempt it in a humorous way.

[ANTO]

The fun really comes through from the off. The word 'Mister' written like that is always funny - I think it was Doris Day who used to call her leading man 'Mister!' when she was irate in the rom-coms - it was funny seeing her blow her top. Super playful Moon.
We dreamers need someone to ground us to stop us floating away for good like a kids gratis balloon from the Mall but they can annoy us by their level-headedness. Opposites attract is how I read this. I really enjoyed it Moon, thank you. :)

[Moonie]

Amen to that!! I concur completely. I am glad you enjoyed it. :))

[stars are far]

that was very beautiful, it was bursting with amazing emotions.
i loved this work very much. keep on the good work dear :)

[Moonie]

Thank you for checking it out! :)

[Woody]

and it is a fun write indeed. clever wording, Moon's. where you, poets at the Cafe, find your ideas beats me.

[Moonie]

Moi?? Really? And I have always wondered where you got your amazing stories from. :) Seriously, you're one of the wittiest friends I have. :) Thank you for reading this one.

[Woody]

yes really. I wish I had your knack in poetry.
I'm humbled that you should think of me as witty :)

[Moonie]

Oh, you rank along with Holmes and House(not the one in your story, the one with the usher joke) for me, Woody! :) Honestly! :) I wish I had your wit.:))

[Woody]

:)))))))))