Wine and Water

~a fun write~

Your fortified tinctures

have diluted my memories, Mister!

Your vanilla essences

have ruined my past.

It is time, that mildness was a crime.

Your hard, cool logic solidified my

flying thoughts,

crystallized my airy mind,

wet and sobered my dreams,--

Weighing them down.

Your clear, little head,

brainstorming

my storms

has reduced them to dust.

Author's Note

I had fun writing this one, I hope you have fun reading it.

Reviews

[FOih;]

"brainstorming my storms" is my favorite line. I have a question though, illogical as it might seem, but isn't chaos in all love stories? I'm not defending someone who destroy's dreams, but love isn't sans its stormy weather now and again...

Reading it again though, that the storms do reduce your dreams to dust, tell me you need someone who can build rather than destroy.

[Moonie]

Thank you, Ian, for the beautiful words. I am all for chaos and illogical things...in this scribble I was trying to convey realism vs romanticism...I had a vision of two lovers, intricately connected and yet so apart in their views...one's the dreamer, the other is the logician. And I thought perhaps I should show the situation through their eyes. This is the one shown through the dreamer's eyes. I have the other one(the one through the logician's eyes) around somewhere, I reckon. I would post it here someday.
Thanks again for stopping by. I haven't been on this site since a long time. I would reciprocate as soon as possible. :)))))

[Amduscia]

White Grapes - A rather refreshing piece of poetry. Very much enjoyed reading. Great stuff.

[Moonie]

Thank you, Amduscia, for the lovely words! Muchly appreciated! :)))

[saudade]

Such a fun piece! I love every word and the ways in which you mastered this piece together. Good work!

[Moonie]

Thank you, Saudade for the lovely review! :))

[Bright Ocean Star]

Moondaughtermost fair, have you been nipping on the hard stuff again? This was delightful! Have a glass or two for me! :)

[Moonie]

Oh no no...I don't huff and tell... thank you, ocean star for visiting!!!
Sure, why not, let's have a virtual girl's night out!! :))

[Roland Petrov]

I did have fun reading it (with a glass of pinot grigio in hand), and half way through I think I wet a sober dream!

[Moonie]

Thank you Roland!! :)) Lol @ wet a sober dream....:))

[~]

Wow, hey I missed this one. I absolutely love it!
braistorming my storms -- and
crystallized my airy mind -- are my two favorite descriptions. I love the magic your mind weaves through time and space, and how you play with senses my dear!
missing your new work :D

[Moonie]

Heya, Mama moon!!! Missed you a lot!! Sorry for the abrupt departure from WC. But now I am back--kinda, sorta of course. But still.
I hope you are doing well...thank you for leaving such a stellar review for me to gape at.... :))

[~]

yay :D hope to see more of you my lovely child!!

[MomzillaNC]

A clever way to tell a condescending critic to keep their condescension to themselves!

[Moonie]

Haha, it's meant for a condescending lover, but hey who am I to argue if the shoe fits a critic as well!!! :))
Thank you, MomZ. :))

[MomzillaNC]

yw :D

[Fran Marie]

This person sounds like sour grapes..a negative person who dashes and dampens your dreams..who needs someone like that anyway,nice work here..

[Moonie]

Thank you , dear ma'am. You are very kind. :))
I appologize for the delay in replying.

[Lydia Shutter]

If someone is reducing your dreams to dust, well, I think he is not as sweet as grapes are. Logic has its place in life, but if someone is always putting down your ideas, that someone is not fun to be around. "brainstorming my storms"....great line. Lydi**

[Moonie]

I understand, not worth it at all, right? Dreams are better than such a person anyway...
Thank you for the lovely review. I appreciate it a lit!!! :D