Ocean Stories

~Just a romantic poem~

To chambers and notches of seaweed,

we can journey, if ever you need

to sleep, hearing the ocean waves.

We would collect the conch shells the sea saves

for lost travellers, like you and me.

We would go together to the foaming sea,

where strange melodies paint images

on the walls of chambers and cages

of the foaming periwinkle sea.

We would go and hear that melody.

When the northern star shall reach out,

and the distant mariner boy would shout,

that it is the time for mermaids to ascend,

we would wait by the caves and hear their voices blend

with the sound of the troubled sea.

Alone, in the silence, only you and me.

When the air is salty and the water hushed, 

we would sleep, wrapped in the golden dust.

Should the cries of the pale skinned sea

ever break our lost rhyming reverie,

we would sing aloud to the moon,

to lull and hush the childish sea soon.

If its promise, the platinum moon shall keep,

we would drown again in our sleep,

and dream beautiful dreams of voices in a shell,

Till the dawn arrives and tinkles the church bells

of some distant, dry, deserted town's core.

We would awake again and be washed ashore.

Author's Note

Ocean Songs- Black Tide

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

one of the finest poem of the sea i have read here!! one of the finest .. somehow i clicked to listen to the music as i read .. i usually read first so i am not distracted .. but this piece swims together, music and word ... i feel like kelp in serenade with the current and the moon .. enchanting and beautiful .. well done says i .. well done!!
E.

[Moonie]

What a brilliant review!!! I am flattered, dear E. I truly am! The album "ocean songs" is one of my favourite albums, and this song seemed to go well with the poem. Thank you so much!! :) :)

[Moonie]

Ps, my dear ocean star taught me how to include songs here. Kudos to her!!!!........Suck it, technology!!!

[Captain Rilen]

Such a beautiful piece of poetry. Absolutely loved it!

[Moonie]

Thank you! :) Sorry for the late reply. I wasn't online for 2 months.

[ms. barrie]

gorgeous, serene, takes the reader far away where they
never want to come back. your words paints a a landscape
of oceanic fantasies. thank you for sharing! ~ b.

[Moonie]

Thank you, dear! :) I am sorry for the late reply. I was quite inactive these past 2 months.

[~]

Yes!! Romantic indeed. Well done!!

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. I am happy you enjoyed it. :)

[~]

I am a sucker for romance :)

[Moonie]

I've never been good with romance, but I try my best. :)

[Riss Ryker]

This one touched my soul. Hauntingly beautiful! Intensely visual and compelling. I have no criticisms to offer here, not a one. Just a beautiful, enchanting piece! The sea is my favorite place in the world and the words you painted brought me right there...now THIS is what poetry is all about.
Most Excellent.

[Moonie]

Ahh, you flatter me, my dear friend!!! I can't hope for a better review. Thank you! :)

[The Twin Arenas]

so sea-y.

lots of images. can totally see the silverstein appreciation. and a Dirty Three song!

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[Moonie]

That is one of my favourite albums!! (I ve an odd taste in music) ..And Silverstein is my favorite poet. I grew up reading his poems. Thank you for such a great review! :)
ps do you think the poem sounds too long? Should I divide it into smaller stanzas? Someone told me that that would make it more comfortable to read. I wanted the poem to sound like a story, that is why I didn't divide it into so many stanzas. But, now that doesn't sound so witty.

[The Twin Arenas]

No way, it's big and full like water. To me, things dealing with water and the ocean and stuff - they can't be long enough. Once I'm in, if it's good, I don't want it to stop. Water, as a subject, does this to me more than anything. Probably because I'm landlocked. It's totally comfortable to read. Like standing under a waterfall, man. Frankly, a little dinky a*s piece about the ocean would just be silly (to me). Ocean's no dinky a*s thing. I liked it, really. Edit away, but keep those big chunky swells. :)

[Moonie]

Big and full like water, eh?? Thank you. Will do! :) ps, I am not landlocked at all and I still love the ocean. The water, the sea.. they do something to you. They make you calm, yet they give you such an adrenalin rush..it's insane...

[The Twin Arenas]

Absolutely. The ocean is, like, I don't know. It's magic. I can't believe such a thing exists. Any large body of water where I can think that I can fall off the end of it like a table, I'm so blown away by it.

[Moonie]

Exactly, to fall off into an ocean of dreams, and then to be woken up by the sounds of the dull, dry(pun intended!) world. The song seemed to go so well with the images of the ocean..... It's a beautiful song, honestly, I love the whole album. I can't believe you know the band.

[The Twin Arenas]

I looooove Dirty Three. Warren Ellis is a master. The soundtrack he did with Nick Cave for The Assassination of Jesse James is always close at hand.

[Moonie]

He's a legend!! "Song for Bob" is a sure favourite! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful description took me to my favorite place. The ocean allowed us to feel calm and safe in her embrace. Good visions and places create by your excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Moonie]

Thabk you for such a stellar review! :) The ocean is truly a beautiful place to be at peace with one's thoughts.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and you are welcome.

[Ana B.]

agh......such a beautiful piece of fairy tale.....smoothing and caressing across the mind....for some reason it reminds me of the song ''Passing afternoon'' by Iron and Wine. Beautiful poetry :)

[Moonie]

I haven't heard that song, but I intend to now. Thank you for such kind words! I feel humbled.

[Moonie]

Downloading it right now...:) :)

[Ana B.]

:) i hope you liked it!

[MomzillaNC]

Love the line, "of the foaming periwinkle sea." Really evocative imagery. Makes the reader feel part of the sea itself.

[Moonie]

Thank you. It's a play on words. Periwinkle--the colour and the marine animal...

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Oh, fair bright daughter of brother moon, you write so beautifully. This was exquisite! I could see you lying on the beach with a lover, letting the water climb higher and higher until it got the bottom of your dress wet. This was positively transportive. The words lulled you in to this soft, seductive play of the waves. You could almost hear the breeze in the distance. I'm so happy you shared this one, so we could enjoy reading it so much! Thank you! A new favorite!

[Bright Ocean Star]

lunar daughter, I am most sorry. My bloody computer won't let me save it to my favorites file right now. I will have to come back later when it is more agreeable...I promise to re-visit this one, though. I love the beaches and the sound of the oceans. This one was most romantic. Kalypso would love this one...:)

[Moonie]

Oh, ocean star, you flatter me... thanks a lot for helping me with the embedded links. I would recommend that you listen the song. It's one of my favourite songs.

[AprilRN1210]

this is quite lovely.. waves of emotion meets the flow of moonlit romance... oh yes, I enjoyed.. the flow and imagery was almost magical.. nicely done:)

[Moonie]

Thank you, dear April. :)