Gingerbread

~gingerbread~

Reviews

[Confuser]

Moon's fairest daughter: Worldly 'junk' can lure the most righteous person away. It is such a beautiful writing. It's packed full of frustration and sadness at the way we allow ourselves to fall into that pit of empty desire. The metaphor of gingerbread men is brilliant, and unfortunately greed leads the way for too many. 'But not for free love' is so profound, but it does exist, I believe. For everything to be transparent: honesty and kindness to be in the forefront of our mind would change the world. Every line is a plea for hope. Your ending is beautiful. Great writing & Congratulations. Well deserved. Thank you so very much! Dale

[Moonie]

Hello, Dale! It's very nice to meet you.... I look forward to reading your work too. :))
Thank you for the lovely review! I feel truly humbled.... :))

[Confuser]

Hello to you Moon's fairest daughter: You are so kind! I am a novice; you're so so talented!!! You're welcome, but THANK YOU for the beautiful poem. Bravo!

[Moonie]

Thank you, Dale!! I have no words left to express my gratitude. :))
it feels so good to be appreciated by as great a poet as you..
Love and hugs (the autocorrect changed it to bugs initially, thank god I changed it back!!!)

[Confuser]

That's for sure...Mosquito's have taken over here!!! Thanks/you'll see grammar errors in my poetry; sorry; need to find time to correct & will - thank you sweet lady!

[MomzillaNC]

Materialism is the bane of every soul seeking enlightenment. It does seem sometime seem the Net is an empty place trying to suck us in to fill itself up with meaningless and financially costly, ever more, needing the newest, always topping itself stuff!

NOTES:
"all the [tracks] that lead" The word "tract" refers to expanses of land

[Moonie]

Thanks for the spell check and for stopping by, dear!

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Hope it was helpful.

[MsJewel]

Very creative and clever. Love your use of metaphor in this well written poem. It's always a delight to read your poetry.

:) Julie

[Moonie]

I am glad you liked this one! :)) thabk you for your generous comment! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

Fairest Daughter, I love this one. Bravo! Very nice write. I especially love the last line. "Enlighten the rest like japanese lights hung on trees of gold." Very nice, indeed!

[Moonie]

Thank you, dearest ocean star. I am sorry for the late reply. I wasn't online for 3 weeks! :(
Japanese lights(japanese lanterns) are paper containers with lights inside, just like we humans are! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

I had the same problem about a month ago. It isn't fun. Very glad to see you back here, though! :)

[Moonie]

I am glad as well. I ve missed Writer's café a lot! :)
Message me if I have skipped any of your poems, dear ocean star! :))

[pinhead07]

As real as it gets - amazing. Cash, material and s**t has made people consumers - along with some false moral tales - on people's minds these days. Draining them off for no reason, whilst they off and go to fulfill some delusion that may guarantee them happiness in a word. So they can have their happily ever after in this world. Loved every word of it of this poem. Too many opinions, sources of information - too, and not enough knowledge for people to know what the heck they're doing - as if one can just decide right and wrong and then impose it on the rest of mankind.

[Moonie]

Wow, lovely response! Thank you very much! :))
People have gone utterly berserk these days!!!!

[Einstein Noodle]

o i like it! the illusions of the material world, the cyber world .. false people .. all tear a little bit of our hearts and souls .. one little peck at a time ..
forgive me for picking my favorite lines but:
"this candied lattice of floating
stars."
is it :) very emotive cry .. screaming pain .. like puking up whats polluted and being cleansed .. eyow! i feel this to the pit of my gut
E.

[Moonie]

Thanks, E! One little peck is all it takes sometimes! Forgive me for picking my favourite line, but I reckon none can beat " puking up whats poluted and being cleansed":))

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'm with you Moon. Come join hands in the illusion of it all and lets settle down to our lives of enlightenment. It cold be worse like Syria or jehad!

[Moonie]

True! This illusion, this sick illusion.....

[elvenom]

It's really hard to get rid of the internet addiction..and any other sort of addiction, but it's not impossible if we have strong will.

[Moonie]

I believe its not hard at all, if we have the will to do it. Thanks for visiting! :))

[realmwriter]

We are but a fleeting glimps of ourselves. We strive to be that which we can never become and in so doing we have forsaken all that is worth doing and all that is worth humanities efforts. We seek only to improve self with no thaught or care for our fellow man because we are so busy trying to achieve the impossible. We have become fake and blind to the truth. So very sad the state of affairs our affairs have led us to. Very nicely done. I really appreciate the context of this piece.

[Moonie]

And I really appreciate your review! Your reviews are so beautiful, they sound like writing in themselves.:))

[realmwriter]

Oh, I don't know about that. I just appreciate when someone puts thought into a review they give me, so I try to do the same for all that I review. You are most welcome.

[John Anderson]

This poem is beautifully expressed and powerfully delivered

[Moonie]

Thanks for the beautifully expressed review!!!! :))