What a soft and delicate lament. Time. It has a way of moving so swiftly that we miss it as it just grazes by us, but it can move so very slowly that we feel as if we are susspended by it, unable and perhaps unwilling to relinquish ourselves from it. So beautiful and soulful. I love the metaphors you use, comparing time to Frozen Vanilla Ice Cream.
oooo, fairest daughter...this one is deliciously descriptive and decidedly naughty. I'm not sure where you were going metaphorically, but I love the mystery in this poem....good job.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Hahaha, "decidedly naughty" -- I was aiming for a children's poem!
I have missed your reviews.. read moreHahaha, "decidedly naughty" -- I was aiming for a children's poem!
I have missed your reviews, dear ocean star. Where have you been?
10 Years Ago
my house was struck by lightning and it took way too long for the telephone company to come out and .. read moremy house was struck by lightning and it took way too long for the telephone company to come out and rescue my lack of internet. Fried the wall socket and the internet router. I got out of the habit of playing on this piece of addictive hardware. I've missed you all so much, especially your wonderful work. Be well, fairest daughter.
What a soft and delicate lament. Time. It has a way of moving so swiftly that we miss it as it just grazes by us, but it can move so very slowly that we feel as if we are susspended by it, unable and perhaps unwilling to relinquish ourselves from it. So beautiful and soulful. I love the metaphors you use, comparing time to Frozen Vanilla Ice Cream.
Mmmmmmmm. A very delicious poem.
I love when time pauses so sweetly.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Who doesn't, dear?? ;)
Huh, only if time would always be this way--suspended in a sweet momen.. read moreWho doesn't, dear?? ;)
Huh, only if time would always be this way--suspended in a sweet moment....
It's dreamy and even very sensual. Of course I like the ice cream metaphor! And it's well carried out throughout the poem. Very nice.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you, dearest Jennie ma'am!!:))
I can always leave it on you to make me smile with your s.. read moreThank you, dearest Jennie ma'am!!:))
I can always leave it on you to make me smile with your sweet words.
Haahhaha! I reviewed when I saw it in the news feed, before the request xD
ahahahaha, be humbl.. read moreHaahhaha! I reviewed when I saw it in the news feed, before the request xD
ahahahaha, be humble,my ferocious xx
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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