Moon daughter, you are wonderful to read. I love the imagery. You have such a sweet, gentle writing voice, and I could read your stuff all night. I love how you ended this one..
"I slip quietly away.
Pull my cloak up and wander
to those strange fireplaces
which, I know, are yarns of delusion."...beautiful and mysterious...a great combination.
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10 Years Ago
I can't thank you enough for this amazing review. :))
Good job! You made the fireplace so alive, that I could just see it calling the persona. It is impressive that you are able to write a short poem, but I know and feel the character. The imagery was really good and the haunting mood you do so well with. Keep writing!
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10 Years Ago
Thanks so much, dear Renee. I am glad you liie this one. :))
Love the personification here of the fireplace, like a lover luring you to into their trap, refreshing, like a winter read, since it's so hot here! Well done Moon!
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10 Years Ago
Thanks for the lovely review. And I have been feeling a bit wintery for sometime now. :))
It f.. read moreThanks for the lovely review. And I have been feeling a bit wintery for sometime now. :))
It feels good to see you again, dear Frieda.
"Flaxen fireplaces with shiny mantelpieces"--very imaginative and probably not something I would think of myself! :) But it truly works, conveying a false sense of warmth...
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10 Years Ago
Those are my favourite lines too!! :))
I am glad you found time to review this one. It feels g.. read moreThose are my favourite lines too!! :))
I am glad you found time to review this one. It feels great to hear from you qgain. I have been a bit inactive recently. =))
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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