Moon daughter, you are wonderful to read. I love the imagery. You have such a sweet, gentle writing voice, and I could read your stuff all night. I love how you ended this one..
"I slip quietly away.
Pull my cloak up and wander
to those strange fireplaces
which, I know, are yarns of delusion."...beautiful and mysterious...a great combination.
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I can't thank you enough for this amazing review. :))
Moon daughter, you are wonderful to read. I love the imagery. You have such a sweet, gentle writing voice, and I could read your stuff all night. I love how you ended this one..
"I slip quietly away.
Pull my cloak up and wander
to those strange fireplaces
which, I know, are yarns of delusion."...beautiful and mysterious...a great combination.
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10 Years Ago
I can't thank you enough for this amazing review. :))
The personification of the fireplace is excellent and the dark, but not chilling, msterious feel of your words draws the reader in. Excellent writing. You are very talented!
Hmm . . . the invisible barrier, an oasis to the thirst-craven . . . a wayfarer who sees beyond the world of reality (at least current) an yearns for the existence that's just beyond reach. It's the equivalent of the wanderer walking down God's path, with each mile gained, a distraction arises, pulling them back two-miles, salvation and happiness is in sight, but reaching that destination is a long arduous journey, and the wanderer can only trudge onward, deflecting and reflecting his tribulations with the best of his abilities. Or, I could be way off, and we're really talking about fire-places. . . been known to happen, if so disregard first portion of review.
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No, I am not "really" talking about fireplaces. The poem is about the false senses of warmth and sec.. read moreNo, I am not "really" talking about fireplaces. The poem is about the false senses of warmth and security that attract people on their arduous journeys. And you are on the right track(no pun intended) Thank you for the brilliant review. :)
The poem is amazing.
"All is deception," my instincts claim.
But my heart gives way,
I slip quietly away."
I wanted to know more. I like the internal thoughts and the statements leading to the open ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
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Thank you for the lovely words, dear Coyote. I feel humbled. :))
I just couldn't actually link the description with the meaning I got from the poem 😞
Why should the fire places promising to induce warmth tend to be a lie?! I got confused... I apologize....
You're talented a plenty, and can always use the precise vocabulary to create extravagant images! Keep writing and shine on, dear ferocious An'ou'shka ;)
Best of luck!
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The fireplaces here are not real. They are like mirages that keep the protagonist from going on in h.. read moreThe fireplaces here are not real. They are like mirages that keep the protagonist from going on in his journey. They are "flaxen" that look "shiny" and inviting.
And thanks for the amazing words. It is always a pleasure.
oooooooo! just the right amount of menace .. Little Red in the dark woods .. who isnt attracted to the fires glow ... i enjoyed reading this very much .. wouldn't change a thing
E.
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Oh, that is what any poet would aim for!! Thanks for the amazing words.
--lunar lady
If you're a dreamer, come in
If you're a dreamer, a wisher, a liar
A hope er, a pray-er, a magic bean buyer,
If you're a pretender, come sit by my fire
For we have some flax-golden tales to spin
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