The meagre quarter

The past never goes away, we just stop seeing it.

In the year's meagre quarter:

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well done! start to finish .. great title! love the pic .. puts me in this mystical dream mood of grey .. and a pinch of reality for seasoning .. love the images your poem conjures ..
"and the withered leaves would,
litter my porch;"
those lines especially .. nice job!
E.

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. It means a lot to me that you like it. There are many memories in the central character's past which he has buried in the dust of time. But whenever he is alone, they all seem to rise from their graves like ghosts and call him to walk alongside them. That is the meagre quarter in which he sees his real self. I believe that though we shouldn't concentrate on the past and lead our present and blah, blah -that everyone says, the past never leaves us.=)

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my! you make me want to dive off the high board ... maybe try a flip or something .. :)
love love love
E.

[Moonie]

That's just how I am. I make people want to dive off high boards.=)) thanks again for the love.:))

[elvenom]

Magnificent story with words that grab you and take you directly into it. Love the way you wrote this. Your note is really interesting as it bring some philosophy behind the writing which I totally approve. Great work!

[Moonie]

I love the review and am overjoyed that you like the poem.

[C. Rose]

Then English spelling of "meager" is freaking me out because I'm used to the American spelling.

You've got a set a haunting images. Nicely done.

I question where you break your lines. I tend to exaggerate pauses between lines so it feels odd (to me) to break mid phrase. My suggestion is to turn pairs of lines into one liners. For example "When the chilly winds would howl, louder than the wild wolves".

[Moonie]

Sorry for the english spelling. Thank you for such kind words. I do plan to change the line breaks since it sounds clumsy to you. :))

[Emily]

I love how you describe things, It was like I was there! Keep it up!

[Moonie]

Thank you for such an amazing review. I do like to pay a lot of stress on imagery. Glad you liked it.

[A. Amos]

Deep and profound piece of writing, past is part of us and stay with us till the time we die...good job!

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. I love the comment. :))

[A. Amos]

Pleasure is all mine...

[vaishnavi]

nice poem with beautiful words
u said The past never goes away, we just stop seeing it.
but i think that we should not focus on the past which hurts and should concentrate on our today which can create a beautiful future and a wise past for future. ^_^

[Moonie]

Thank you for such a beautiful review.

[vaishnavi]

your welcome !!

[Jennie Baron]

A theme/topic we can all understand, and so beautifully worded. Very nice indeed.

[Moonie]

Thanks a lot. Hearing that from an awesome poet like you makes me feel honoured. :))

[Jennie Baron]

You're too kind!

[Purbleazaleya]

This was dark and mysterious. This reminds me of memories that used to be important to people, or things that haunted them, but is no more significant to those around them. But the person still remembers those memories and when they are alone at night, they return after a long time to try and bother the person, but it doesn't bother them much anymore, it's just something they ponder on.

[Moonie]

Thank you for reviewing. I love your review and am glad you got the true meaning behind it. There are countless memories in the central character's past that he has buried in the dust of time. But whenever he is alone, they all seem to rise from their graves like ghosts and call him to walk with them again. That is the meagre quarter when he sees his real self.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem. I like the feel of mystery and story. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Moonie]

Thank you for such lovely words. :))

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.