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The meagre quarter

The meagre quarter

A Poem by Moonie
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The past never goes away, we just stop seeing it.

"
In the year's meagre quarter:
When the chilly winds would howl,
louder than the wild wolves;
and the withered leaves would,
litter my porch;
When silver birds with pearly eyes,
would dance around my window.
When the sinister ghosts of life would 
beckon me,
and the spirits of the dead would
rise again
from their graves, into the night,
to linger and roam and haunt
the streets that once belonged to them
(But belong no more)
That is when you would find me...

Sometimes stooping, sometimes walking
on the pavement, alongside the ghosts...
          

© 2014 Moonie


Author's Note

Moonie
The past never goes away, we just stop seeing it. Review and comment please and tell me what you think.

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well done! start to finish .. great title! love the pic .. puts me in this mystical dream mood of grey .. and a pinch of reality for seasoning .. love the images your poem conjures ..
"and the withered leaves would,
litter my porch;"
those lines especially .. nice job!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much. It means a lot to me that you like it. There are many memories in the central .. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

oh my! you make me want to dive off the high board ... maybe try a flip or something .. :)
lov.. read more
Moonie

10 Years Ago

That's just how I am. I make people want to dive off high boards.=)) thanks again for the love.:))



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I am here on a re-read!
and loving it 😍

Posted 10 Years Ago


Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Awww....thank you,love 😍💕
Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

I'd do that next time:P
Daydreamer

10 Years Ago

Oops :o I was here on a second re-read :P
Oh I love this, you darkly colored out of the lines so brilliantly...I felt this one!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much, dear Frieda. The highest honour a poet can get is when someone says that they f.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I concur, nothing better than when the poetry is 'felt'...my pleasure Moon :)
well done! start to finish .. great title! love the pic .. puts me in this mystical dream mood of grey .. and a pinch of reality for seasoning .. love the images your poem conjures ..
"and the withered leaves would,
litter my porch;"
those lines especially .. nice job!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much. It means a lot to me that you like it. There are many memories in the central .. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

oh my! you make me want to dive off the high board ... maybe try a flip or something .. :)
lov.. read more
Moonie

10 Years Ago

That's just how I am. I make people want to dive off high boards.=)) thanks again for the love.:))
**shiver** oh my gosh i love this. good job

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Gracias! Thank you very much. And yeah, *shudder*
Totally awesome! Keep up the great work! :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lawt for the totally awesome comment!:))
Violet Stone

10 Years Ago

You are extremely welcome :3
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DrD
I like your metaphors and economy of words to express thoughts almost abstract in nature but forming concepts that truly haunt each of us. A wonderful write. I applaud it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much, sir. Im glad you liked it.:)
Interesting read good job

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much, ma'am!:)
I am a fan of surrealism, and this had its fair share of phantasmagorical traces dancing on the mind. Especially with that last line. My only real suggestion would be that I am uncertain if all the 'would's are necessary; try dropping them, and see how it sounds? I also avoid repetition of and in the same sentence "to linger and roam and hunt", so I would advice dropping out an and; go with punctuation, or reword perhaps?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

What do you think of "to linger and roam and to haunt"
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

The to doesn't really fix it, and if anything it just drags. It is difficult to do without changing.. read more
Moonie

10 Years Ago

I dont like the sound of it. It sounds a bit out of place and gathers too much attention for my liki.. read more
This was one of the best polished, most well-crafted poems I have read here in many months. it is quite beautiful in phraseology and it was delightful to read. You should enter this in one of Writer's Cafe's contests. I would certainly vote for it. Outstanding job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Moonie

10 Years Ago

That is so sweet! Thanks for such kind words. You made me blush today. I think I have entered this o.. read more

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