Alpha

                                                 I am the enchantress of this forest

I am the mistress of fire,

the crafter of words,

I am an archangel 's desire.

I am a seer, a crystal ball gazer,

a wizard, an alchemist, 

a magic tree seeder.

I am the Thief Lord,

the High Witch of Canterbury, 

moon's fairest daughter, 

I am Athena, Artemis, Aphrodite.

I am the speaker of waves,

the interpreter of dreams

I am the reason minstrels sing,

I am thunder's call.

I am the fair haired Queen

I am infinity and all...

Author's Note

I chose the title alpha to emphasize the dominance of the narrator. Please review and comment.

Reviews

[Eric]

It read like the back of a book and after making its point just kept going with the same idea - I like the title Alpha if it had an edgy push against male dominance however as it's written I'd call it narcissist - she sounds like a great character but I'd like to see her focus on one skill and excel at that - I am not totally against this poem it just feels a little like saying: I am the leaf blower, the lawn raker, the carpet cleaner, the dog washer, I am the driver and the wind, the sky and storm, I am the lover and the hater but instead of interesting places to go like I am the toilet and the waste...the poems focus is all about ME and POWER I am wind storm fire the quake that shakes the earth the flame that lights the sky... if my understanding is in error please tell me :)

[Moonie]

Hahaha. I actually found that funny. The bit about im the leaf blower, the lawn raker, a carpet cleaner.

though I would like to say that this poem symbolises power. I wrote it for one of the characters in my novel. I wrote it without any hidden meaning(something which is definitely not my forte), just keeping the idea of conveying power in my mind. As it turns out, everyone would see the poem differently since it was written without a specific underlying metaphor. You saw it as a narcissist person boasting about her many skills and other epreaders saw it differently. According to me, the real meaning is that every person is simply blessed with such amazing talents and still he /she is afraid to use it. I like the fact that you were bold and honest enough to write this review.

[Moonie]

Also, for powerful people like monarchs, their minions just coined up various terms to make them happy. Like oh, subduar of your enemy, warrior of the sky, envy of your foes etc etc. I tried to incorporate the same feel.

[Aethereal]

A beautiful mythological free verse poem! Alpha is all of those Psychological archetypes that have haunted the human psyche for thousands of years. Mythology was just how ancients delt with these archetypes. Personifying these Psychological traits helped to unify ancient tribes under banners of common languages. Reality is how we feel, and how our feelings change our fate.

[Moonie]

Thank you for such deep words. I'm honoured that you like the poem.

[Jennie Baron]

I love the magical, ethereal quality of this one. Well done! You have obviously thought out your word choices well and it works.

[Moonie]

You flatter me. Gosh!!!thanks a lot..I never thought that this poem would ever get appreciated.

[elvenom]

I love the magical scenery and seeds of epicness it holds. Mythology does add extra effect to the whole poem and overall you've written something simply amazing. Just the type of poetry I look for and adore. Wonderful job.

[Moonie]

Thank you for this amazing review. You are most welcome to read my poetry and stories if ever you find time. Feel free to send me read requests. I would read as soon as possible. :))

[elvenom]

You are welcome. I forgot to mention that you chose the name really well because it suits the writing very well. Also, my favorite part is the last three lines
"I am thunder's call.
I am the fair haired Queen
I am infinity and all."
..simply because it is..epic!

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem for nature.
"I am Minerva, Artemis, Aphrodite.
I am the speaker of waves,
the interpreter of dreams"
The goddesses left us with myth and tale. Nice thoughts and visions create by the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Moonie]

Thank you for such kind words. Honestly, I thought that the poem would never be liked. :))

[Coyote Poetry]

The gods and the goddesses are always a good read.

[Chris Micha]

I need my dreams interpreted pretty bad! ;)

This was magical and right out of the deepest imagination possible. To be the desire of an archangel, well now that's saying something there!

Very well written a so whimsical! :)

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. I can actually interpret dreams btw. So you can give me a call whenever you need a dream to be interpreted. ;))

[Chris Micha]

Oh boy then you would have a doosie with last nights! :)

[Moonie]

Really?;)) try me..

[Chris Micha]

Well I'll just say the first one. I dreamed I was in WWII...fighting in the field?

[Moonie]

That's quite a dream... were u winning or losing and who's side were you on?

[Chris Micha]

Americans and I honestly don't know who was winning. I also dreamed John Legend was in it too and was shot down. So It was really weird!

[Moonie]

I guess it shows your inner desires of letting your critics know what you can do. It shows you wanna show someone that you can do something they thought you wouldn't be able to do.

[Chris Micha]

Hmmmm this might just be true :)

[Moonie]

It also shows that someone you depended on has done something to lose your trust or is no longer with you.

[Purbleazaleya]

I liked this very much. You portrayed the dominance of the persona easily, she is confident and she knows she is powerful. I also like that the font is green, it gives an impression of the forest, which is where the alpha rules. Good job!

[Moonie]

Glad you liked it. I loved your review and I really appreciate that you liked the green font and the whole idea behind it. :))

[willweb]

Extremely enchanting and magical. This created visions so beautiful. I really enjoyed this.

[Moonie]

I am glad you enjoyed it.:)) thank you for such a beautiful review. You are most welcome to read my stories and poetry whenever you find time.

[Daydreamer]

Flawless word choice, particularly in the phrases:- "crafter of words" and "magic tree seeder"....
But I couldn't tell if I got the main theme right😆
Is it that it's a human who posses many qualities and thinks they're too much? Or someone broken trying to suffice herself through this alleviation? But again, you're a good constructor of poetry and I like your talent in general 😉💘😉💘😉💘

[Moonie]

Thank you for such wonderful words. I m actually blushing after hearing such words. I wil let you in a secret: I wrote this poem without any underlying theme in mind. I wrote it for one of my characters in the novel im trying to write. So the poem didn't have any real theme except being a self praising monologue, but your comment actually made me wonder if there was a hidden meaning. I think the poem is about every person being full of brilliant qualities and yet fearing life and its difficulties. That is what I think but I also like your interpretations. Maybe you weren't able to decide on one theme because the poem was written without a theme and can be taken in any sense the reader intends.

[Daydreamer]

Exactly! The poem was very versatile, by typically seeing through my perspective I could find moments of self-passion as well as moments of despise to that self-passion! People who often think they suffice themselves, feel this way! Anyway, still beautiful regardless what it means💗💖 and many people would try to write about a theme like this one but fail.. That's what made me appreciate it; that you were able to embrace writing it without making it feel traditional! Looking forward to reading your story xx ♥

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. Now it feels as if the poem was meant to be this way:versatile, as you say. Im extremely happy that you like it. Personally I thought that this poem lacked gunpowder. But after such brilliant remarks.....well, what can I say...your remark made my day..:))

[Daydreamer]

You seriously need to stop thanking me! I feel obliged to say in sheer honesty what I think about almost anything! And it's even written in my bio, that I am super passionate about any kind of beauty, so it feels like betrayal if I don't convey what exactly I see in a thing! :)💖

[Moonie]

Okay I won't thank you in this comment. Im sorry if it annoyed you in any way.:))

[Daydreamer]

Hahahaha, good girl💗
And "No" ♥

[Moonie]

Did you just compare me to a dog by saying "good girl"??? :)) im gonna say "THANX, good boy"...:))

[Daydreamer]

Omg,why? How could I do that!😞

[Moonie]

U say good girl to a dog.. it's fine I called you good boy and also thanked you...hahaha ;))

[Nusquam Esse]

I think the main issue I have with this is using 'Minerva', which is the Roman equivalent of Athena. Not only is a Roman god out of place among two Greeks, but Athena fits better with the whole 'A' theme on that line. Otherwise, the lines seem to flow smooth. An enjoyable read.

[Moonie]

I debated on the same point for a long time when I was writing yhe poem. Athena seemed to destroy the effect for which I was going and minerva seemed to stand out wiyh the other two greek goddesses. In the end, I decided to trust my instincts and use minerva. You have a very keen eye. I had hoped no one would see that it stands out. I luuuuv your reviews. They are so constructive. I am facing a major dilemma and I hope you would find time to help me. I can't decide if I should use" crystal ball gazer" or "crystal ball reader" please help.

[Nusquam Esse]

I am used to examining almost every facet of my own writing, so after so much proofreading, I have become much more attentive to the small things; and unlike the majority of the people on here, I am willing to come across harsh in order to suggest improvements. With writing, it is about looking at both the big (the flow, important for surrealism) and the small.
I would personally go for gazer myself; my reason? I feel like 'gazer' carries a feeling that the contents of the ball are more enigmatic; which I feel is good for the mystical vibe.

[Moonie]

Thank younvery much. I kept "gazer "because of its ethereal quality but "reader "seemed to rhyme with "seeder "in the next to next line. I think we shouldn't force rhyme and let the poem come out the way it wants, so I'll keep gazer. Thanx.

[Nusquam Esse]

Exactly my mentality... this style of free-verse, so nuances should take precedence over word-play. Different styles of poem should put emphasis on different things, no poem is, can, or should be, perfect on every possible category.