Alpha

                                                 I am the enchantress of this forest

I am the mistress of fire,

the crafter of words,

I am an archangel 's desire.

I am a seer, a crystal ball gazer,

a wizard, an alchemist, 

a magic tree seeder.

I am the Thief Lord,

the High Witch of Canterbury, 

moon's fairest daughter, 

I am Athena, Artemis, Aphrodite.

I am the speaker of waves,

the interpreter of dreams

I am the reason minstrels sing,

I am thunder's call.

I am the fair haired Queen

I am infinity and all...

Author's Note

I chose the title alpha to emphasize the dominance of the narrator. Please review and comment.

Reviews

[Eric]

It read like the back of a book and after making its point just kept going with the same idea - I like the title Alpha if it had an edgy push against male dominance however as it's written I'd call it narcissist - she sounds like a great character but I'd like to see her focus on one skill and excel at that - I am not totally against this poem it just feels a little like saying: I am the leaf blower, the lawn raker, the carpet cleaner, the dog washer, I am the driver and the wind, the sky and storm, I am the lover and the hater but instead of interesting places to go like I am the toilet and the waste...the poems focus is all about ME and POWER I am wind storm fire the quake that shakes the earth the flame that lights the sky... if my understanding is in error please tell me :)

[Moonie]

Hahaha. I actually found that funny. The bit about im the leaf blower, the lawn raker, a carpet cleaner.

though I would like to say that this poem symbolises power. I wrote it for one of the characters in my novel. I wrote it without any hidden meaning(something which is definitely not my forte), just keeping the idea of conveying power in my mind. As it turns out, everyone would see the poem differently since it was written without a specific underlying metaphor. You saw it as a narcissist person boasting about her many skills and other epreaders saw it differently. According to me, the real meaning is that every person is simply blessed with such amazing talents and still he /she is afraid to use it. I like the fact that you were bold and honest enough to write this review.

[Moonie]

Also, for powerful people like monarchs, their minions just coined up various terms to make them happy. Like oh, subduar of your enemy, warrior of the sky, envy of your foes etc etc. I tried to incorporate the same feel.

[Alfred Kukitz]

You would be the women toppling all dreams, your words, your rhythms, the enchantment pervading your soul all combined in a reality of blowing a man's mind.

regards,
al

[Einstein Noodle]

love it Moon girl! such admirable strength and character you have imbued ... the green is most effective and i see you in the pic ... i should ask you what my fortune may be! ;)
E.

[Moonie]

It's getting more and more difficult for you to find a poem up here which you haven't reviewed yet.... :P
I better get my bum back to work!
And thanks for another lovely review! :*
Hugs!

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ...you should! .... :)

[Eddie Davis]

A very proud proclamation, one that hints at fantastic fae realms filled with magic and beauty. Well said, we welcome you here.

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. This poem, to me, is all about power. I wrote it for one of my characters but never thought I would post it as a solo entry. Turns out, life is not what you expect it to be.:)

[Awakened Rose]

why yes, I AM :) hehe this was amazing!! I truly enjoyed this lovely piece. Thank you so much for sharing :)

[Moonie]

Hahaha. Yes, I AM and YOU ARE. The motive behind this poem is to convey the message that every human is a perfect piece of god's work and yet we continue to doubt ourselves and fear life. This poem is chiefly about power and that we all are powerful. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. :))

[John Anderson]

This is beautifully expressed and wonderfully written

[Moonie]

Thank you very much. You are far too kind!:))

[ReneeJ]

The repetition of " I am" gives this poem so much power. The poem overall represents power and strength to me. I enjoyed the passion, very good! (I have to agree that the green font was a bit hard to read)

[Moonie]

Thank you for such lovely words. I apologise about the green font. I used it merely to simulate the atmosphere of a forest since that is where the alpha resides.

[vaishnavi]

its a nice poem words r rhyming,nicely depicted :D

[Moonie]

Thank you very much.

[vaishnavi]

your welcome :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is usually not my type of my style I like to read. The topic doesn't interest me and never really has. I like how you wrote this though. It is appealing. The green font sort of made me want to not read it though because it caused my eyes to squint. I don't have the best eyes and not the worst eyes either. You did a lovely job otherwise.

[Moonie]

I am sorry about the green font. I appologize for causing you all the trouble. I'm glad you liked the poem.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh don't apologize :) you're welcome.