Baby, Don't you see?

Been a LONG time since I wrote something new. This piece really means a lot to me. Hope you guys feel the emotions in it and appreciate it as much as I do. Written for the love of my life.

Baby
Don't you see what is happening here?
I'm fighting to stay in your arms
And nothing is stronger than our love
Something I can't live without
Locked in eachothers eyes

Oh your touch
Don't you see I miss it when you aren't here?
It can heal even my greatest wounds
Something I can't live without
When we are in eachothers arms

Oh your smile
Don't you see it lights up the sky of my life?
It makes even the darkest of days brighter than the sun
Something I can't live without
When you smile in my direction

Oh your laugh
Don't you see it makes my day?
It makes me happy to see you laugh at even my stupidist jokes
Something I can't live without
When you laugh when I'm trying to be funny

Oh your kiss
Don't you see it means so much?
It makes me smile in the middle of it when it shows how you care
Something I can't live without
When you kiss me when I least expect

Oh your love
Don't you see it's what has kept me going at my worst?
It keeps me strong when I just feel so weak and about to break
Something I can't live without
When you love me so

And through the worst
We can push through it all
For I know
This was all meant to be
But life comes with trials and tribulations
To prove that we want this
And I know I'll fight til the end
To keep you here in my arms

Baby
Don't you see we were meant to be?
That you are my one and only
Your warming touch
Your soft smile
Your cute laugh
Your sweet kiss
Your incredible love
Are all so great
And you must know now
That I love you too

Author's Note

Enjoy :)

Reviews

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

OMG!!!! LOVE THIS!!!!!!! =D

Love how the emotion just flows from this so well and is shown very clearly in each line.

It is an amasing poem, so don't get me wrong when I say: this would be a lovely song if it were done right. =D

(And I can see why some people call you a hopeless romantic lol)

[LilyGrace]

Nice concept, nice use of an unusual structure. I like how you haven't been bound by the usual styles but seem to have found your own. Try to branch out with your vocabulary and avoid those cliches which we all use.
Blessed Be.
LGD

[topsyturvy]

It's been awhile, and am very glad to have stopped and read this. Great work Nana, yes like they've all said, it has a flowy rhythmic feel to it that can pass for a song. It was well written and if you're girl sees this, she'll be gushing out, and sighing happily contented that you're love for her is real!:)

[Zane Mathias]

Good write dude! i know just how you feel to have a love that is worth everything!!!! keep up the great work!

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful write and a great tribute. You express yourself in so many ways how could the love of your life not know how you feel. A brilliant piece and I love the way everything gets sumed up at the end. I do agree it has a song feel to it and I recon it would go great with music. Keep writing my friend!!!!

[These Haunted Hallways]

Hehe, aw, man, i had tears when i read this one hehe. Incredibly beautiful and romantic in every way! :) She will definitely love this so much! I think it is very powerful, because of your deep emotions. It's also very creative they way ya did this, too. Great wording. My best to ya, and good luck to ya both :)

B.A.

[Damien Dsoul]

Hi there, old friend. Long time no see, and I'm sorry for not being around here as once I used to be.

Now about your poem, or should I rather refer to it as a song? It has the feel and levity of a song. Very delicate the words are in each verse, and there as well is a pristine sense of detail as each verse captures some uniqueness of the woman whom the poem is directed at. This song feels more like something that ought to be said on a lover's wedding day.