My Love My Gift

For a girl.

My love
My gift
You come with so many complications
But I suppose that is why I love you
I can't help but fall to pieces in your eyes
Your gaze can cripple the mighty
And resurrect the dead.

Oh how I fell to this place
This place of pure joy and happiness
I'd spill my life just to make you happy
Whatever comes our way we will make it over it
I couldn't imagine my life without you there
I couldn't imagine the nights I would cry
I couldn't imagine the moments we could have had
I want you there for all eternity
Even if it means I lose myself
I just want to see your smiling face there all the time.

So I place my heart in your hands
And give the choice to love it or crush it
I know your choice and that makes it all the better
So I thank you for the love you give me
For without you there I know that I would die.

Know that you complete me
You make my soul whole
And my world complete
A world that used to be dark and shadowed
You came in and showed me the light that lies within
I don't think I could have gone much longer without you
I would have fallen in so deep that I would die.

For without you by my side
The whole world is an unpainted canvas.

Reviews

[LilyGrace]

This is lovely. One can only hope that some day someone writes something like this for me. Your girlfriend is a lucky woman, by the sounds of things.
It sounds like real passion has gone in to the writing of this. It could maybe do with a little more structure, but here I think I'm just searching for something to criticise... Maybe not. :p
LGD

[Brittney]

this is i think the best poem i have read in a long time. such passion and love. you are a great writer. i love this poem. good job, no wait great job. i hope to read more like this one.

[Sarah]

Great job with this, it was really cute. (: I love the symbolism of the unpainted canvas at the end, and also the line about giving your entire self up for this person. Really sweet!^^

[Zane Mathias]

very very very good. This is actually a great write. I very much enjoyed this poem and its word usage and flow.

[Deranged Kiwi]

The repetition of "complete" in the second to last stanza sounds a bit strange. Maybe even "I would die" could be further described: I mean, instead of just putting it out there, describe it. The last two lines are my absolute favorite and I think you could do another poem based on love being like an unpainted canvas. Your opening stanza is strong and I like that you speak to the heart in the very beginning. Overall it's a great poem and she seems like an awesome person. It's always good to have someone like that to inspire you to write ^_^ kudos, AJ