Delaying gratification in a society that's conditioned to want everything immediately requires this.....Faith!
…Go on Faith😡🌵
Scorched sand sizzled hot with a blister.
Rising heat sucked the air out the day
and the motionless sun like an unblinking eye
poked bones and my brains in its way.
I buckled to my knees from exhaustion
then my face hit the sand full flat.
Without water, each breath was a dry pain hurtin’
and my blood thickened more from its lack.
A pump handle shimmered in the day’s heat
and I focused, crawling to it ‘cross the land.
Hanging there was a sign, “Go North five feet.
Dig for water in a box in the sand.”
Scratched eyes searched frantic for its pinpoint.
Charred fingers clawed the sand going deep.
As I dug with a frenzy, then I felt something hard.
Had I liquid for some tears, I would weep.
In the box, I found a bottle full of water.
“Don’t Drink” said the jug’s top sign.
“Pour half, prime the pump then wait five.
Pour the other half in, pump nine.”
I blistered in my madness for the water.
Five minutes more of thirst was too great.
I twisted off the lid and I tilted up the jug
but those words “Don’t Drink” made me wait.
After nine pumps, I fell against the handle.
Liquid sputtered then it spurted from the spout.
I was drenched and wallowed, bathed and swallowed
in water, sweet by words I rued to doubt.
And on the bottom of the bottle was a clear sign,
“Fill this bottle for the box, please do,
for the next soul searching for a Life-raft
who may have to go on Faith like you!”
George, George - When crafting this, I used 2 ounces of engaged word play, a ½ pint of “rhythm an.. read moreGeorge, George - When crafting this, I used 2 ounces of engaged word play, a ½ pint of “rhythm and rhyme” over-sprinkled with 1 rare tablespoon of “provoked phrasing” and then baked it to achieve that deep dish level of "depth appreciation". So very happy you stopped in for a poetic bite. Come on back anytime to the Cafe restaurant. We never close and there’s always something cookin’ in the oven. Thanks for your words and for really enjoying this GC. Namyh
I loved the lines below. Your alliteration and word choice is amazing.
"Liquid sputtered then it spurted from the spout. I was drenched and wallowed, bathed and swallowed in water, sweet by words I rued to doubt. ”
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P2P - Hey, that's also one of my favorites. You should have seen the rewrites. Makes this poet puffe.. read moreP2P - Hey, that's also one of my favorites. You should have seen the rewrites. Makes this poet puffed-out proud that you loved it too. Whenever you're thirsty, just 'Go on Faith'. Thanks for spendin' a spell P2P. Namyh