Minecraft Hardcore: A Story

Tell me what you think about everything or anything!
Just so you know, I'm in the process of rewriting this entire story, as I originally started writing this in 2014 (in the forgotten days of high school) so when the writing quality suddenly drops, that's why.
I also want to mention that this is a Fanfiction that was inspired by a series on Youtube dubbed Minecraft Hardcore, made by a Youtuber by the name of PeanutButterGamer. The link to his channel is here: https://www.youtube.com/user/PeanutButterGamer and I don't think that this story would be what it is without having that inspiration behind it.
Also, also, the picture I used was originally done by Djohaal on Deviantart - I didn't make it!
Well, that's all I have to say, so, have at 'er.