Our Hearts

It is our heart that defines our soul and character

OUR HEARTS

Our hearts are greedy,

They always desire for more

And more of love too.

Our hearts are faithful,

To those who love sincerely

And remain loyal.

Our hearts are restless,

They do not remain at peace 

For they stay awake.

Our hearts are heartless,

They do not stop troubling all

Those who are in love.

Our hearts are sinful,

They attract all the vice deeds,

Bringing wickedness.

Our hearts are two pronged.

It is how we choose to be

Either good or bad. 

Author's Note

Each stanza is a senryu

Reviews

[Gabby The GAB]

I like these kind of poems. Deep thoughts merging in a single piece.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am glad I could write something you like reading. Thank you very much.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

love your 2nd verse the most
love the whole poem
well done lovely

[Vicky]

Agreed. Very relatable line.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much to you both :)

[Flowers of Eternity]

You really described what our heart is. Beautiful work.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much. 😀

[Onlyme]

Now, this is a fantastic use of words and senryu. Enjoyed this greatly. Except points and facts made about our heart.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for such kind words :)

[Onlyme]

My pleasure sweetheart 😊

[Vicky]

I liked the line "our hearts are greedy." really good opening. interested me immediately. Nice theme; the entire poem circled around that concept 'the prongs of good and bad.' Just so you know, I--and everyone I know--read "troubling" as three syllables. Might be the same for others.

[Najam Us Saher]

Well in that case, I may correct them :)
I make sure that when I write counting the syllables it remains perfect.
That very line (Our hearts are greedy) made me write this poem. I am happy that you enjoyed reading this one. Thank you very much.

[Vicky]

Always a pleasure

[Ace Jaxon]

Very true, our hearts are of betrayal and love, such a beautiful topic of hope and despair. I hope to read more!

[Najam Us Saher]

Sure, thank you very much.

[barleygirl]

I admire your crafting of several short-format poems into a longer story-poem . . . but in reality, these are senryu . . . both these forms have the 17-syllable rule, but haiku is about nature, while senryu is about human nature. I love the way you show the good & bad sides of human nature, then you present this as our choice to make, which I wholeheartedly agree with (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for the information. Always very kind of you too honestly review my work. Thank you very much.

[MoonStruck]

Very well written Najam..yes it all starts with the heart and ends with it ...Heart is the culprit!!

[Najam Us Saher]

Ah! I feel like you read this poem at a very wrong time.

[ashish hajagulkar]

Awesome man good keep it up

[Najam Us Saher]

I am a girl.
Thank you so much.

[Abraham George]

Haha my same doubt.

[Abraham George]

@ ashish- Najam is a girl. especially my beloved sister.
First i mistake Najam as a boy and from there our friendship starts.

[ashish hajagulkar]

I got that sorry

[Najam Us Saher]

It's okay.

[Gaurav]

The heart of your poem is heart :P
Nice read Najam. Thanks for sharing :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh! Took me a while to understand that, very nice. Thank you so much ☺