Our Hearts

It is our heart that defines our soul and character

OUR HEARTS

Our hearts are greedy,

They always desire for more

And more of love too.

Our hearts are faithful,

To those who love sincerely

And remain loyal.

Our hearts are restless,

They do not remain at peace 

For they stay awake.

Our hearts are heartless,

They do not stop troubling all

Those who are in love.

Our hearts are sinful,

They attract all the vice deeds,

Bringing wickedness.

Our hearts are two pronged.

It is how we choose to be

Either good or bad. 

Author's Note

Each stanza is a senryu

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The decision we must make. Good or bad. We will pay for either. I liked the honest thoughts and the logic in the words. Thank you Najam for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Neville]

not only clever and well crafted, but beautiful too... N

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for appreciating my words :)

[Neville]

my sincere pleasure

[midniterider]

wise words of wisdom ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for reading and appreciating.

[Deepak Belbase]

the heart is meant to be like this man! I like the things you said about our hearts. yes, I'm agreed with you, my friend. the heart is much more complicated. But your poem is not. you've explained it in a very simple way. And it's like white, clean and simple and that make it beautiful, thanks for sharing!

[Najam Us Saher]

I am happy that you agree. Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it.

[Black Jess]

The heart is such a pure piece of our soul and such a delicate subject to write about, and you did it simply and beautifully *-*
Well done ^^

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much ☺

[Black Jess]

you're welcome ^^

[Ethan]

This is pretty good, though sometimes it feels as though you're forcing words to conform to the poem's form, as opposed to writing more fluidly (eg. they always desire for more
and more of love too). Good job.

[Najam Us Saher]

I get what you are trying to say.
While the word 'greedy' gives a negative meaning I added the line 'and more of love too' to stress that loving more is not being greedy.
Thank you so much for the honest feedback much appreciated as always :)

[Amada]

my heart is a hollow muscular organ that pumps the blood through the circulatory system by rhythmic contraction and dilation. In vertebrates there may be up to four chambers (as in humans), with two atria and two ventricles.

[Najam Us Saher]

Great to go! You can be a cardiologist. Your parents will be so proud of you.

[Amada]

Hihi thanks but I Love maths 😃😃😃.

[Em_qureshi]

Amazing ! I loved every verse, but the 4th one was my favourite

[Najam Us Saher]

Ah! I am really happy that you enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've always had trouble writing in the haiku/senryu form but it's nice to see so many senryus compiled to form one poem. Our hearts certainly are troublesome, to say the least...
Good write. I enjoyed reading it :)

[Najam Us Saher]

I used to think that too, writing in the meter and form is not my cup of tea, but I developed a liking for this 5-7-5 syllable form. I am sure once you try, you will enjoy and write more of it. I believe in you that soon you will share that with us all. Thank you very much for reading this :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

ah I'm more of a ranter and even though I've written one and posted too but still difficult but you do have a point :)
You're welcome and thank you too :D

[Najam Us Saher]

If you write any further, I am looking forward to read them. ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm not usually the one to impose, but since you ask, tell me what you think of this one if you haven't so far read ;) :P
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/yumnakay/2050979/
And of course, I'll try writing more since I'm too curious to try new forms :D

[Anjali]

The words are so simple yet there is a deeper meaning and it is true too... I like the simplicity of your words and how you make its simplicity even more beautiful... Keep on creating!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for reading. I always look forward for your review.

[Anjali]

That's so sweet...☺