Silenced Sculptures

 SILENCED SCULPTURES

Inanimate structures of stone,

Forever stranded left alone.

Standing for centuries so long,

Everyone ignores and gets along.

Two sculptures stood together, 

Stayed united in severe weather.

A boy stood admiring the girl,

Her blush, Oh! so easy to be seen;

Even when her skin is coloured pearl.

Lifeless they were, they started speaking,

To live a life, they started believing.

Passionately in love they always stayed,

Only for each other they were made.

Becoming lively, their hearts beat,

Being so close, they never met.

Their hearts spoke words of love,

They felt high, so above.

A day of winter came, 

When her place didn't remain the same.

She was separated from her lovers' gaze,

He spent months in a daze. 

Thunder were his shouts,

Their love was true, no doubt.

Rain drenched him over,

He regretted not being with her closer.

Tears were easy to be seen despite the rain,

His heart was unable to be healed from the tormenting pain.

She was the one who made him feel alive,

No one resembled her, none alike. 

A weeping angel he became,

His love for her he couldn't acclaim.

Better are statues with a loving heart,

Than the humans with a heart so hard. 

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

thanks again for another entry of this poem into my competition, this time a belated judging, sorry and thanks for being so understanding, good luck to you. beautifully written

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

thankyou so much for entering this beauty into my competition i read it again and felt at once i was in a graveyard with statues, dont ask me why but they came alive in your poem, thanks so much. good luck again

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much. I am very happy that you enjoyed reading this.

[Onlyme]

A heartbreaking poem about long-distance lovers. And how one suddenly stop communicating and the other is distressed and broken with fret over her.

[Najam Us Saher]

That is true. Thank you very much for sharing your views.

[Onlyme]

my pleasure Najam, for sharing your gifts with us all. :)

[barleygirl]

This may seem weird, but your poem reminds me of the internet phenomenon known as "catfish" (it's an MTV program here in the USA). It's about how people "connect" online, but never actually meet in person. Then one day, one of them disappears. It is said that person was a catfish (fake). Your idea of using statues to symbolize fake lovers is imaginative. I like the play between modern love situations (online) and old fashioned symbols of the past (statues) Fondly, Margie

In V5, this line seems awkward ("lost" used twice) and also it feels like you're reaching for this rhyme (using a cliché "lost in a maze"): "He felt lost as being lost in a maze."

[Najam Us Saher]

I can recall when you say about the program, I have watched it once and found it very distressing that people get cheated very easily.
I will change that line right now, thank you very much for the correction. ☺

[Harley Quinn]

This poem is amazing. You're so creative.

[Najam Us Saher]

You have my greatest gratitude. ☺

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

wow this is so erethreal is that a word? that is so beautiful xx

[Najam Us Saher]

You made my day. Thank you very much from bottom of my heart.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

well its truly beautiful

[Paul Bell]

Great poem.
Who really stops to look.
Yet the story is there to be marvelled.
Maybe we should open our eyes to read the story.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for appreciating my poem. It means a lot.

[Mustafa Merchant]

I am gonna look at statues very differently now. Thank to you words.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am happy that my words gave you a different perspective. Thank you so much.

[Anish Gowda]

Awesome.. loved the poetic description. It was a unique way of describing things. Enjoyed reading it. Keep it up..😊😊

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much, it means a lot ☺

[marilyn 1225]

fabulous poem fabulous ending which i so agree with great talent

[Najam Us Saher]

I feel honoured to hear such kind words, I thank you from bottom of my heart.