Blessing and a lesson

You wanted to stay when I decided to leave after waiting for so long.

BLESSING AND A LESSON

I needed you so bad,

I wanted to meet you,

But I was not your priority.

I wanted to forget you,

I gathered courage within myself and I did,

I distanced myself from you,

But you never did. 

My heart throbbed in pain 

When I was away from you,

My eyes poured rain

When I couldn't see a future for us. 

I missed you and knew that you did too,

Nights, I spent sleepless,

Thinking you spent the same way,

It took me time,

To move on,

I gathered courage and I did.

One fine day, 

You appeared,

I couldn't meet your eyes,

And my heart whispered 'too late'

I struggled,

I was restless,

You lived,

While I felt breathless,

I wanted to die,

You wanted me to live a life along with you,

I cried,

You suffered in silence,

I died,

Because of the situations.

I became weak,

You were my only strength,

As you were gone,

I learnt how to be independent.

One fine day, you came.

My heart skipped a beat,

I wanted to end the game.

You asked for a chance,

But now I wasn't the same.

You suffered,

My eyes shed tears,

You were helpless,

I felt the same too,

You came,

When I wanted to leave,

I felt bad, a chance, I couldn't give,

All the promises, all the believes,

Came to an end and I feel deceived.

Love, once again I couldn't receive

And I am left here in tormented memories, to grieve. 

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Najam, you can always enlighten a dead heart by your words and bring it to life.
So so beautiful :)

Thank you so much for this Piece.
all the best girl.

[Zoya]

Very relatable, this is exactly what happens. I loved the way you ended the first stanza. Well done!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading this.

[Zoya]

A pleasure

[Desiree O'Neal]

wow, This was good, I love how you told a whole story in the poem.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much, I am glad that you liked it :)

[conversations with her ..]

I really enjoyed this poem, and I’m looking forward to reading more of your pieces. I'm kind of new on here and it would be an honor if you can review my 4 new recent poems. (The world is ours, Nostalgia, Paradise, and You)

Thank you and Keep up the Good work!

[Najam Us Saher]

Sure, I will. Thank you very much for taking the time to read my poems. It means a lot.

[SilverInk]

I adore the emotions shown in this piece, but I would have liked it more if it had a bit more of a rhythm to the rhyme.

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay, I get it. Thank you very much for such honest review, much appreciated.

[Anjali]

Such a empowering and beautiful read it is! I enjoyed reading this.. your words are placed in the perfect Manner and the emotions and the structure everything! Just amazing!!

[Najam Us Saher]

I am widely elated to know that you liked this, thank you so much :)

[Anjali]

You are very welcome!

[Saumya]

No matter how much one tries, how dedicated they are towards others, there naturally are some relationships that don't last long.... Regardless of how hard we try to bring it back, it's never the kind of comfortable we wish and want it to be, maybe because it's not actually meant to be.

Sometimes, it's hard, but better to accept people and situations as they are, and not force it to be.If it's meant to be, it definitely will be, maybe later, maybe after years.But if it's not meant to be, it will never be, no matter how much we try. Sometimes moving on feels better than holding on, specially when the other person makes us feel unwanted, because waiting in such cases is worthless and it indeed hurts.


Thankyou for writing and sharing this lively poem Najam, the simplicity and the intense emotions in your words made it a very relatable piece for me.
Sad, yet a wonderful piece!😊

Well done!

[Najam Us Saher]

Your words make me feel happy about the decision I made. You are absolutely right, some relationships are not meant to last forever, how hard we may try. Moving on really feels good because you know how much courage you had in yourself. It takes time to understand and feel complete but once we make our mind that we can be better with out them that is when life helps you to stay without them too. Thank you so much for such insightful review. You made my day. Glad to be your friend. ☺

[Saumya]

You're most welcome, Najam😊
Take care.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, but of course, they have a knack of returning mostly when we decide to move on, and the ability to turn the tables around... It never helps being dependent on someone for your emotional stability and happiness... Nice write, Najam. And very relatable...

[Najam Us Saher]

You are absolutely right, when everything seems to run smoothly something happens that disturbs it. Thank you so much for reading and for sharing your views. I am glad that you found it relatable.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome :)

[Mavericks]

Beautiful Poem, Najam jee.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much.

[ElizaB]

Thank you as always for entering your piece.

I really liked this, it tells a story and keeps the reader interested until the end. It is a shame however that it is not a happy ending but that is the risk one takes with love no matter what age or time in life, it is always a leap into the unknown.

I liked this line in particular:
My eyes poured rain

Thank you, again

[Najam Us Saher]

I thank you very much for reading ☺