Fish bowl

FISH BOWL

O' beauty of my bowl,

Do you like living there?

O' you tiny soul,

If you don't want to stay; break away.

 

O' little fish gliding in exuberance,

How do you live happily?

O' small life of innocence,

Teach me your way.

O' fragile fish, you capture my attention, 

Doesn't your beauty fade away?

O' fish of my admiration,

There is nothing less about you to say.

O' joyful soul; mini delight, 

Why are you going away?

O' pleasure of my sight,

Guide me thy way. 

Reviews

[Joey Nizz]

O' what a creative writing, reminds me of the time when I had a fish ball back then..
Your lines about a simple fish ball made them feel special.

Thank you again for sharing such a beautiful writing.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much, I am extremely happy that my poem made you remember some good memories, Also, I had a fish aquarium when I was a kid. 😀

[Joey Nizz]

your welcome and yes It gave me some good memories of my mini aquarium, it used to have the best looking koi fish but sadly they dad after years..

[Anjali]

I remember that I was obsessed with fishes😅😅 thank you for writing this. It's beautiful!

[Najam Us Saher]

I am happy that you can relate as well. I thank you so much for reading ☺

[Anjali]

You are welcome.

[RhythmOfTheRiver]

It's amazing! The little pleasures of life are actually the best and true ones...

[Najam Us Saher]

I wholeheartedly agree with you. Thank you so much 😊

[Saumya]

Watching the fishes and admiring their beauty and the small yet and incredibly wonderful life has been some of the things I've really loved as a kid, and I still do..That experience is very Serene and soothing😊

Small may this bowl be, and little are those beautiful creatures inside it, but that shows a complete Living ecosystem alive, an ecosystem which is indispensable without water, and an environment that can teach us a lot, if we wish too!

Thankyou for sharing this poem, Najam.Your poem is as beautiful as the little lovely creatures in the fish bowl, that never fails to me us smile thoughtfully.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am overwhelmed to hear that you can relate as well. I also liked admiring the fishes when I was a kid, I never got bored of it. We were kids without smartphones and technology so we found our own ways to amuse ourselves and that made us joyful too.
Thank you so much for sharing your childhood memories, pleased to hear them ☺

[Saumya]

Very true!😊 & I agree.
The kind of happiness it was to be around that cute little fish bowl can't be replaced by anything else.
Nothing is more lively that those natural little creatures afterall!😊

You're most welcome, Najam.

[Farhan Shaikh]

This is really good...and something to learn from...I got the message.. loved it

[Najam Us Saher]

I am happy that this poem could help you. You have my greatest gratitude. ☺

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Reaching for your poetic heights here, Najam.

I enjoyed the write and the theme; a kind of Keatsian ode to a fish bowl and it's inhabitant; very inventive. Perhaps use apostrophe after each 'O' or exclamation to give the letter greater force and impact, as if you are throwing your plea of beauty upon the universe.

A write of simplicity with grasp reaching for the stars of language. Nicely done.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much, I did think about using an apostrophe but I read a poem in which it was not written in that way. I will make the changes thank you so much, it means a lot :)

[Hasventhran Baskaran]

A feel good poem from you. This one is refreshing to read.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am grateful that you found it to be refreshing. Thank you very much ☺

[Jiya]

Amazing! It's so effortless, simply impeccable!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much for stopping by. It really means a lot :)

[Sikandar Khan]

hehehehe smj kuchnehe ae lines ki magar asa lag rha aik zalim larki aik masoom fishka mazak bna rahe hehehehehe mind mt krna agr mind hua to

[Najam Us Saher]

Mazak nahi uda rahi bas wo fish ki tarif me kuch likha usne waisi poem hai. Thank you for reading.

[Sikandar Khan]

acha acha mien to mazak kr rha tha bs achi poem ha...

[Avia]

I like the concept of the poem. I imagine staring at a fish bowl with a tiny being swimming, happily unconcerned with life's issues. A lovely poem :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah those memories are sweet. I am happy that you were able to recollect some good memories. Thank you so much :)